Bonjour j'aimerais que l'on corrige mon anglais, je suis en terminale s :
My dear Eveline,
Why didn't you come with me ? You are afraid of a life in a new country or of a life unknown. You would have been happy with me if you had left from your house but your choice is to stay in Ireland with your father who doesn't give make you have happy. You will become my wife if you want. We could have a children, you could have a job which pleases you. You will be aine. If you came to this country, people would respect you and then when they saw you they would tell you "Good morning". Your father wouldn't beat you, I promise. You could have everything, I would buy all for you. We could live anywhere you want and we shall live on love. Please come with me in this country. You will never lose me if you live with me.
Goodbye my love
Dear Frank,
Your words touched me and I really miss you but if I come from your house, I will be afraid by something that I could discover and afraid of what people would tell about I promised to my mother to stay in her house nd here I have food and shelter. It's true, I work too hard in the Stores but I like this job. It's as if I had grown faster than one would need but my father need ma and I can't leave without him because he's my father for life. Imagine if I come with you he will die in his home without anyone. I would like to marry you and live with you but my life she started in Ireland and I think it can stop here.
Goodbye love of my life
Merci à tous ceux qui pourront m'aider.
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Correction De Mon Exercice
Débuté par chocali, oct. 21 2011 18:20
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Posté 21 octobre 2011 - 18:46
chocali, le 21 octobre 2011 - 18:20, dit :
Bonjour j'aimerais que l'on corrige mon anglais, je suis en terminale s :
My dear Eveline,
Why didn't you come with me ? You are afraid of a life in a new country or of an unknown life unknown (place de l'adjectif). You would have been happy with me if you had left from your house but your choice is was to stay in Ireland with your father who doesn't give make you have happy (drôle de construction !). You will/would become my wife if you want/wanted to. We could have a children, you could have a job which pleases you. You will/would be aine (???). If you came to this country, people would respect you and then when they saw you they would tell you "Good morning" (N'est-ce pas un peu puéril ?). Your father wouldn't beat you, I promise. You could have everything, I would buy all everything for you. We could live anywhere you want and we shall would live on love (alone). Please come with me in to this country. You will never lose me if you live with me.
Goodbye my love
Dear Frank,
Your words touched me and I really miss you but if I come from go to your house, I will be am afraid by something that of what I could discover and afraid of what people would tell about what I promised to my mother, that is to stay in her house and here where I have food and shelter. It's true, I work too hard in the Stores but I like this job. It's as if I had grown faster than one would need but my father needs me and I can't leave (ou "live" ?) without him because he's my father for life (quite right, Jack!). Imagine/Just imagine! If I come went with you he will would die in his home without anyone. I would like to marry you and live with you but my life she started in Ireland and I think it can stop/end/finish here.
Goodbye love of my life
Merci à tous ceux qui pourront m'aider.
My dear Eveline,
Why didn't you come with me ? You are afraid of a life in a new country or of an unknown life unknown (place de l'adjectif). You would have been happy with me if you had left from your house but your choice is was to stay in Ireland with your father who doesn't give make you have happy (drôle de construction !). You will/would become my wife if you want/wanted to. We could have a children, you could have a job which pleases you. You will/would be aine (???). If you came to this country, people would respect you and then when they saw you they would tell you "Good morning" (N'est-ce pas un peu puéril ?). Your father wouldn't beat you, I promise. You could have everything, I would buy all everything for you. We could live anywhere you want and we shall would live on love (alone). Please come with me in to this country. You will never lose me if you live with me.
Goodbye my love
Dear Frank,
Your words touched me and I really miss you but if I come from go to your house, I will be am afraid by something that of what I could discover and afraid of what people would tell about what I promised to my mother, that is to stay in her house and here where I have food and shelter. It's true, I work too hard in the Stores but I like this job. It's as if I had grown faster than one would need but my father needs me and I can't leave (ou "live" ?) without him because he's my father for life (quite right, Jack!). Imagine/Just imagine! If I come went with you he will would die in his home without anyone. I would like to marry you and live with you but my life she started in Ireland and I think it can stop/end/finish here.
Goodbye love of my life
Merci à tous ceux qui pourront m'aider.
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Posté 21 octobre 2011 - 20:01
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