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#1 lycéen01

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Posté 16 octobre 2011 - 19:51

Bonsoir,
J'aurai besoin qu'on me corrige mes fautes pour ces deux textes;

1) Why do people travel?
There are many reasons. First some people travel for financial reasons .In fact a lot of people travels abroad and generally to the countries of the north as France to have a better work. Indeed people travel because they want to see their families and their friends who live far away. I’m one of those people because every year I visit my family in Morocco.
Another important reason why people travel is to experience another culture or learn another language. For example a lot of French people travel in England to improve their English.
Apart from the language many young people travel abroad and generally in the United States and in England to enter in a better school as Oxford or Harvard

2)  I would like to visit Dubai because it's an amazing city. if i go there the first thing i would see is Palm Islands. Palm Islands  is an island in the shape of palm, almost entirely built on sand brought in enormous quantities.
Furthermore Dubai is a city where criminal acts are forbidden, we can live with freedom. So after my studies i will settle in Dubai and get a good job well paid and to form my family: i want my children to be grown in a secure city without any danger.
And if i don't have a chance to find a job there, i'll go there just to visit at least. It's a city where it is warm and nice with many beaches...good to have some sunbath.

merci d'avance

#2 yveslouis

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Posté 18 octobre 2011 - 13:11

Voir le messagelycéen01, le 16 octobre 2011 - 19:51, dit :

Bonsoir,
J'aurai besoin qu'on me corrige mes fautes pour ces deux textes;

1) Why do people travel?
There are many reasons (why people travel). First, some people travel for financial reasons. In fact a lot of people travels abroad, and generally to the countries of the north as northern countries like France to have a better work. Indeed, people travel because they want to see their families and their friends who live far away. I’m one of those people because, every year, I visit my family in Morocco.
Another important reason why people travel is to experience another culture or learn another language. For example a lot of French people travel in/go to England to improve their English.
Apart from the language many young people travel abroad and generally in the United States and in England to enter in a better school as like Oxford or Harvard.

2)  I would like to visit Dubai because it's an amazing city. if i go I went there, the first thing i I would  see is Palm Islands. Palm Islands  is an island in the shape of a palmtree, almost entirely built on sand brought in enormous quantities.
Furthermore Dubai is a city where criminal acts are forbidden, we can live with freedom/safely. So after my studies I will settle in Dubai and get a good, well paid job well paid and to form my  start a family: i (je ne corrige plus le "i" en minuscule...)  want my children to be grown grow in a secure city without any danger.
And if i don't have a chance to find a job there, i'll go there just to visit at least. It's a city where it is warm and nice with many beaches...good to have some sunbath.

merci d'avance

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