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SUJET :How do you explain the success of fast food restaurants all over the world ? Do you personally enjoy going to fast food restaurants ? Why or why not ?

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The success of fast food restaurants can be explain by the fact it is the cheapest restaurants, nowadays everybody can afford to eat there. On the one hand, people find there a convivial atmosphere, they profite from this moment to chat and have fun so they can also meet people and socialise with new personn. On the other hand, most people appreciate this food. They can eat it quickly and like they want (with fingers for hambourger like example). Moreother, the service is very speed compared to the other restaurants : it have people won time at lunch or dinner. That is why fast food restaurant are a great success.

In my opinion, I don’t like very much this sort of restaurant. I am not against eating there occasionally because it is good to try different kind of food. Indeed, it’s unhealthy to eat always the same thing : it is that probably make american people overweight. That’s what happened with me so my parents make me change my bad habits to eat greasy food, since this moment, I have lost weight. If a had children, I would not let them go there everytime. Moreother, I am convinced it is a loss of identity because it grow the influence that the states have here (for instance with mac donalds)

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The success of fast food restaurants can be explained by the fact it is the cheapest restaurants, nowadays everybody can afford to eat there. On the one hand, people find there a convivial atmosphere, they profite from this moment to chat and have fun so they can also meet people and socialise with new persons. On the other hand, most people appreciate this kind of food. They can eat it quickly and as they want (for instance, eating hamburgers with fingers). Moreover, the service is very speed compared to the other restaurants : it makes people have more time at lunch or dinner. That is why fast food restaurant have a great success.

In my opinion, I don’t like very much this sort of restaurant. I am not against eating there occasionally because it is good to try different kind of food. Indeed, it’s unhealthy to eat always the same thing : it is probably the reason why merican people are overweight. That’s what happened with me, so my parents make me change my bad habits to eat greasy food, since this moment, I have lost weight. If a had children, I would not let him going there everytime. Moreover, I am convinced it is a losing (pas sûr) of identity because it grow the influence that the states have here (for instance with mac donalds)