dissert a corriger en anglais........merci.

[meimona]

bonjour,

jaimerais que quelqu'un me corrige ......merci.

le sujet est : que pensez vous de la chasse au renard , des corridas.....etc etc?

In the past , this pratice was comprehensible because the people did it in order to eat but now fox-hunting became a play . People took pleasure in killing animals , in irritating it by push them to fight.

It is a vice ,a pleasure ,an obsession that the people want to satisfy.

Fox-hunting shouldn't be considered like a sport because in fox-hunting there isn't rules ,it is very dangerous .Because ,between fox-hunting and fighting cocks there is a big difference ,there are lots of aspects.

Either people killed animals without regrets or they put their life in danger like bull-fighting in Spain who do many casualty.

And in other part, sometimes people use animals on the way endangered in some "sports".

I don't understand that people could like fox-hunting and demonstrat in favour of it.People think that they demonstrated not only to defend fox-hunting but to preserve rural life.

there are set on fighting fot their rights. But , it is not the problem of the rural life because the rural life don't mean to kill animals.

It is idea in the head of people who live in the country that the fox-hunting make parts of rural life.

In the end ,I think that this practice should be forbidden because this "slaughter" should be stopped or limited by the government.

I think that the government could find a compromise like to start up huntings clubs where people could practice their hoobies in liberty ,whithout put people's life in danger.

voila merci de me corriger car c'est ma premiere dissert de terminale en anglais et je nai jamais été trés doué en anglais :cry: :cry: ......

encore merci...

[cactusjo]

ce doit être trop tard :roll:

blues trop tard donc

[cactusjo]

In the past , this pratice was comprehensible because the people did it in order to eat but nowADAYS fox-hunting HAS BECOME a play . People took pleasure in killing animals , in irritating THEM by pushING them to fight.

It is a vice ,a pleasure ,an obsession that(the) people want to satisfy.

Fox-hunting shouldn't be considered like a sport because in fox-hunting there isn't ANY rule AND it is very dangerous .Because ,between fox-hunting and fighting cocks there is a big difference ,there are lots of aspects. (?????)

Either people kill animals without any regrets or they put their life in danger like bull-fighting in Spain who (do many casualty.)à revoir !

And in other part (???), sometimes people use animals on the way endangered in some "sports".(????)

I don't understand that people CAN like fox-hunting and THEN demonstratE in favour of it (???).People think that they demonstrate not only to defend fox-hunting but to preserve rural life too ( un peu confus).

there are set on fighting(???) fot their rights. But , it is not the problem of the rural life because the rural life dOESN't mean killING animals.

It is idea in the head of people ( à revoir ) who live in the country that( )fox-hunting make parts( ??? belongs to ) rural life.

In the end ( à revoir ),I think that this practice should be forbidden because this "slaughter" should be stopped or limited by the government.

I think that the government could find a compromise like to start up(?) hunting clubs where people could practice their hoobies in liberty ,whithout putTING people's life in danger.

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