Résumé de film

[sarah23000]

Bonjour je dois faire un résumé de film mais je suis vraiment nulle en anglais est ce qu'il serait possible que quelqu'un me corrige s'il vous plait merci d'avance.

 

Marion Crane, a young woman, is the mistress of Sam steals in a moment of misery with a suitcase containing forty dollars that his boss asked him to deposit at the bank. At Night, she stops in a motel with Norman Bates, who confides in himself and explains it in the house near the motel with his old mother invalid and very difficult character. Before going to bed, Marion takes a shower when the old woman comes out and stabs her savagely!
Norman reappears, makes disappear the body of Marion as well as his car (with 40 000 $ in the trunk) in a pond close to the motel. Marion is then wanted by her sister Leila, by Sam and by a detective from an insurance company Arbogast responsible for recovering the money.
The detective goes to the motel. Norman receives him but forbids him formally to meet his mother. Disappointed, Arbogast leaves to phone Leila and Sam and enters the house to talk to the old lady. He climbs the stairs but is greeted with a knife by the shrew.
Leila and Sam go to see the sheriff who tells them that Norman's mother has been dead and buried for eight years. They both separate at the motel and Leila, rummaging through the house almost escapes the fatal stab wounds in the cave of the house. Unmasked by Sam, Norman loses his wig. Two personalities coexisted in him since the death of his mother.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

J'ai beau lire et relire ton texte, il me reste incompréhensible, désolé.

Il semble bien, hélas pour toi, que tu as d'abord écrit ça en français avant de le "traduire", erreur fatale.

Résultat : on ne sait pas qui est qui, ni qui fait quoi. Entre Marion, Norman, Sam et compagnie, c'est un tel méli-mélo qu'une chatte n'y retrouverait pas ses petits.

En anglais plus qu'en français, il faut au minimum savoir à qui renvoie tel ou tel pronom sujet.

Essaie au moins de récrire tout ça en construisant des phrases courtes.

Si tu es amenée à employer des pronoms sujets, il ne faut pas qu'ils soient ambigus mais renvoient au sujet sans erreur possible. Tu piges ?

À te lire.

PS Autant que possible, évite de confondre  les chiffres car il y a une différence importante entre "forty" ligne 2 et "40,000" ligne 9. Relis-toi.

[sarah23000]

Je ne comprends vraiment rien en anglais et je ne serais saurai jamais refaire un texte correct. J'arrive a à peine à me présenter, donc faire un texte serait une catastrophe.

Pourquoi tant de pessimisme ? Pourquoi au contraire ne ferais-tu pas l'effort d'acquérir maintenant les connaissances qui te manquent ? C'est le moment ou jamais en Seconde car l'année prochaine il sera déjà trop tard.

Inscris-toi sur https://www.anglaisfacile.com, c'est gratuit, et travailles-y assidûment pour mémoriser les règles essentielles de l'anglais. Ce site est une véritable mine d'or qui ne demande qu'à être exploitée.

J'ai trouvé un texte mais je ne sais même pas si il est correct.

Marion Crane is a Phoenix, Arizona working girl fed up with having to sneak away during lunch breaks to meet her lover, Sam Loomis, who cannot get married because most of his money goes towards alimony. One Friday, Marion´s employer asks her to take $400,000 in cash to a local bank for deposit. Desperate to make a change in her life, she impulsively leaves town with the money, determined to start a new life with Sam in California. As night falls and a torrential rain obscures the road ahead of her, Marion turns off the main highway. Exhausted from the long drive and the stress of her criminal act, she decides to spend the night at the desolate Bates Motel. The motel is run by Norman Bates, a peculiar young man dominated by his invalid mother. After Norman fixes her a light dinner, Marion goes back to her room for a shower....

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Une fois n'est pas coutume, j'ai arrangé ton texte de façon à le rendre intelligible en m'aidant de celui que tu as trouvé sur le net et qu'il est interdit de copier, tu dois le savoir.

Ce que tu dois maîtriser : l'emploi des adjectifs et pronoms possessifs qui s'accordent en genre et en nombre avec le possesseur.

La voiture de Marion, sa voiture à elle = her car // son patron à elle = her boss.

Mais sa voiture à lui = his car // son argent à lui = his money. Tu piges ?

Marion Crane, a young woman, is the mistress of Sam Loomis. In a moment of misery, she runs away with the four hundred thousand dollars that her boss asked her to deposit at the bank. At night, she stops in a motel run by Norman Bates and his invalid mother. Before going to bed, Marion takes a shower when all of a sudden the old woman comes in and stabs her savagely!

Norman reappears, removes the body of Marion and hides her car away (with $ 400, 000 in the trunk) in a pond close to the motel. Marion is then wanted by her sister Leila, by Sam and by a detective from an insurance company Arbogast who is responsible for recovering the money.

The detective goes to the motel. Norman receives him but strictly forbids him from meeting his mother. Disappointed, Arbogast leaves to phone Leila and Sam and enters the house to talk to the old lady. He climbs the stairs but is greeted with a knife by the shrew.

Leila and Sam go and see the sheriff who tells them that Norman's mother has been dead and buried for eight years. They both separate at the motel and Leila, rummaging through the house almost escapes the fatal stab wounds in the cellar of the house. Unmasked by Sam, Norman loses his wig. Two personalities had been coexisting in him since the death of his mother.

[sarah23000]

merci beaucoup vous me sauvez

 

[Jean B]

Il y a 3 heures, sarah23000 a dit :

merci beaucoup vous me sauvez

 

Si c'est le cas, dis-toi que ce n'est que provisoire.

Lis bien ce que j'ai écrit en vert dans ton second message et applique ce que je t'ai conseillé.

Contrairement à ce que tu as écrit dans ton premier message, ton anglais n'est pas entièrement mauvais.

Bon courage.

[sarah23000]

Encore merci pour votre aide et vos conseil