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[leamichal]

NB Ce forum lui étant réservé exclusivement, il est inutile de mentionner anglais dans le titre des sujets.

Bonjour à tous et à tout , 

J'ai besoin de votre aide , je dois décrire cet article en anglais . Le voici mon brouillon , mon travail est à rendre pour la semaine prochaine je prends de l'avance (: . 

This document is a article of Essential Summer Tv written text by Jessica Jeffries - Britten and Translation by Tara Swann. 

This article consists five series of Netflix to watch during the holidays . 

To begin , the first serie is Stranger  Things . In the photo , there is three characters , these are   (Joyce),  ( Max) and Will Byers.Stranger Things is an American science fiction horror series created , written , and directed by the Duffer Brothers .The first season released in July 2016. The story Strange Thing is set in the fictional rural town of Hawkins , Indiana , during the early 1980s.She(It) tells the story of a child lost in a parallel world, filled with monsters, his(her) friends thus try to find him(it) and will cross(meet) in their path(way) Eleven, a girl telekinesis, all this takes place in year 80. 

Stranger Things , surfing on the 80s and her classics of time , on the fantasy and the adventure , she conquered nomber of spectators .

Then the second serie is Bojack Horseman.In the photo , there is two characters : Bojack Horseman and cat girl . Bojack Horseman is a television series of American animation created by Raphael Bob Waksberg, and since August 22nd , 2014 on Netflix.was  a celebrity in the 1990s, 20 years later, he is an alcoholic, disillusioned.  It is the series of animation that speaks about depression of psychological disorders(confusions) of people which try to comuniquer, the series speaks about the horse Bokack Horseman, he(it) has everything, he(it) has even a shed(house) in Hollywood, women, all which wants, certainly he(it) is very depressive.

 

In the photo , there is two charaters . The serie Master of None is an American television series created by Aziz Ansari and Alan Yang , and spread since November 6th 2015.The title of the series is based on the English expression " Jack of all trades, Master's degree of none ", making a reference for one person having multiple skills but without specific talent for none.The history(story) tells the commonplace everyday life(daily paper) of Dev, an actor for advertisements, thirty-year old and alive in New York.

In the photo there is a man , and background is winter . The Fargo is an American television series of anthology created by Noah Hawley and spread since April 15th, 2014 . She is based on the movie of the same name taken out in 1996, written and realized by the brothers Joel and Ethan Coen, the producers of the series.

Every episode begins with "This is has true story" but in reality this mention is a wink to the movie Fargo and has for unique purpose to deceive spectateur.

In the photo , there are 5 characters. Misfits is a British television series created by Howard Overman and spread of November 12th, 2009.Five young people adoslecent are very young condamée has works general. They are going to knFive young people adoslecent are very young condemend has works general. They are going to know who(which) will have of powers and they also to know that they are not the only ones to change. Following a meutre he(it) are going to have to hide but it is at this moment the mess(brothel) is going to begin.

In my opinion,I had already looked at the series Stranger Things which I liked a lot elsewhere i had pleasure to describe this article.

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Dorénavant et puisque tu ne te relis pas, je vais juste te signaler les fautes en rouge et te laisser le soin de les corriger.

Précision : un x rouge signale une omission, à toi de trouver laquelle.

Si tu ne les comprends pas, mais seulement dans ce cas, tu seras autorisée à questionner.

Si tu veux réellement progresser, ce dont je ne doute pas, sache que ce n'est pas à moi de faire les efforts nécessaires.

This document is a article of Essential Summer Tv written text by Jessica Jeffries - Britten and Translation by Tara Swann. 

This article consists x five series of Netflix to watch during the holidays. 

To begin, the first serie is Stranger Things. In the photo, there is three characters, these are (Joyce), ( Max) and Will Byers. Stranger Things is an American science fiction horror series created, written  and directed by the Duffer Brothers. The first season x released in July 2016. The story Strange Thing is set in the fictional rural town of Hawkins, Indiana, during the early 1980s. She(It) tells the story of a child lost in a parallel world, filled with monsters, his(her) friends thus try to find him(it) and will cross(meet) in their path(way) Eleven, a girl telekinesis, all this takes place in year 80. <<???

Stranger Things, surfing on the 80s and her classics of time, on the fantasy and the adventure, she conquered nomber of spectators .

NB Pour la énième fois, dans l'espoir que ce sera la dernière, je te signale que le point final et la virgule se collent sans espace derrière le mot précédent. Idem pour les points d'interrogation et d'exclamation. L'espace se ménage après.

J'ai tout rectifié ci-dessus mais pas ci-après parce que ça me fatiguerait inutilement !

Then the second serie is Bojack Horseman. In the photo , there is two characters : Bojack Horseman and cat girl . Bojack Horseman is a television series of American animation created by Raphael Bob Waksberg and since August 22nd , 2014 on Netflix. x was  a celebrity in the 1990s, 20 years later, he is an alcoholic, disillusioned.  It is the series of animation that speaks about depression of psychological disorders(confusions) of people which try to comuniquer, the series speaks about the horse Bokack Horseman, he(it) has everything, he(it) has even a shed(house) in Hollywood, women, all which x wants, certainly he(it) is very depressive.

 

In the photo , there is two charaters . The serie Master of None is an American television series created by Aziz Ansari and Alan Yang and spread since November 6th 2015 .The title of the series is based on the English expression " Jack of all trades, Master's degree of none ", making a reference for one person having multiple skills but without specific talent for none. The history(story) tells the commonplace everyday life(daily paper) of Dev, an actor for advertisements, thirty-year old and alive in New York.

In the photo there is a man and x background is winter . The Fargo is an American television series of anthology created by Noah Hawley and spread since April 15th, 2014 . She is based on the movie of the same name taken out in 1996, written and realized by the brothers Joel and Ethan Coen, the producers of the series.

Every episode begins with "This is has true story" but in reality this mention is a wink to the movie Fargo and has for unique purpose to deceive spectateur.

In the photo , there are 5 characters. Misfits is a British television series created by Howard Overman and spread of November 12th, 2009. Five young people adoslecent are very young condamée has works general. < Là, tu as fait vraiment fort !  They are going to kn Five young people adoslecent are very young condemend has works general.< Et rebelote !  They are going to know who(which) will have of powers and they also x to know that they are not the only ones to change. Following a meutre he(it) are going to have to hide but it is at this moment x the mess(brothel) is going to begin.

In my opinion, I had already looked at the series Stranger Things which I liked a lot elsewhere i had found/took pleasure to in describing this article.

Par contre, moi je n'ai eu aucun plaisir à te lire, vraiment !

Sans vouloir t'enfoncer, tu commets des fautes énormes qu'on ne doit plus faire dès la fin de la Sixième de collège.

 

[leamichal]

Bonsoir , j'ai vraiment essayer de donner tout de moi même pour le corrigé , il y'a eu des phrases j'avais du mal à les corriger , merci.

This document is an article of Essential Summer TV written text by Jessica Jeffries - Britten and translated  by Tara Swann. 

This article consists the five series of Netflix to watch during the holidays. 

To begin, the first serie is Stranger Things. In the photo, there are three characters, these are Joyce, Max and Will Byers. Stranger Things is an American science fiction horror series created, written  and directed by the Duffer Brothers. The first season is released in July 2016. The story Strange Thing is set in the fictional rural town of Hawkins, Indiana, during the early 1980s. it tells the story of a child lost in a parallel world, filled with monsters, his(her) friends thus try to find him(it) and will cross(meet) in their path(way) Eleven, a girl telekinesis <---je sais qu'en francais c'est télékinésie je ne sais pas comment on dit en francais , all this takes place in the year 80 year 80. <<??? 

in year 80 Je voulais dire dans les année 80

Stranger Things, surfing on the 80s and the classics of time, on  fantasy and adventure,  it conquered nomber of spectators .

NB Pour la énième fois, dans l'espoir que ce sera la dernière, je te signale que le point final et la virgule se collent sans espace derrière le mot précédent. Idem pour les points d'interrogation et d'exclamation. L'espace se ménage après.

J'ai tout rectifié ci-dessus mais pas ci-après parce que ça me fatiguerait inutilement !

Then the second series is Bojack Horseman. In the photo , there are two characters : Bojack Horseman and cat girl . Bojack Horseman is a television series of American animation created by Raphael Bob Waksberg and since August 22nd , 2014 on Netflix. It was  a celebrity in the 1990s, 20 years later, it is an alcoholic, disillusioned.  It is the series of animation that speaks about depression of psychological disorders(confusions) of people which try to communicate, the series speaks about the horse Bokack Horseman, he has everything,  it  has even a skack in Hollywood, women, all who wants, certainly he is very depressive.

 

In the photo , there are two charaters . The series Master of None is an American television series created by Aziz Ansari and Alan Yang and spread since November 6th 2015 .The title of the series is based on the English expression " Jack of all trades, Master's degree of none ", making a reference for one person having multiple skills but without specific talent for none. The story tells the commonplace everyday life(daily life) of Dev, an actor for advertisements, thirty-year old and alive in New York.

In the photo there is a man and a background is winter . The Fargo is an American television series of anthology created by Noah Hawley and spread since April 15th, 2014 . It is based on the movie of the same name taken out in 1996, written and realized by the brothers Joel and Ethan Coen, the producers of the series.

Every episode begins with "This is a true story" but in reality this mention is a wink to the movie Fargo and has for unique purpose to deceive spectator.

In the photo , there are 5 characters. Misfits is a British television series created by Howard Overman and spread the  November 12th, 2009. Five young people  are very young condemn at general works < Là, tu as fait vraiment fort !   They are going to  Five young people teenager are very young condemend at general works.< Et rebelote !  They are going to know who  will have the powers and they also xto know that they are not the only ones to change. Following a murder  it is  going to have to hide but it is at this moment in the mess(brothel) is going to begin. 

In my opinion, I had already watched  the series Stranger Things which I liked a lot moreover i had found/took pleasure to in describing this article.

 

 

 

[Jean B]

Vu le peu de temps et le peu de soin que tu as consacrés à ta soi-disant correction, je renonce à refaire ce que j'ai déjà fait et bien fait.

Débrouille toi sans moi.

[leamichal]

j'ai consacré du temps , pourquoi vous dîtes ca?

J'assume j'ai des difficultés en Anglais , et je ne fais pas exprès , je vous demande pas de faire le travail à ma place.

Au moins , corriger moi les choses quand je viens de recorriger ?

c'est juste il y'a quelques fautes en rouge que vous m'aviez préciser de recorriger j'ai vraiment du mal, je vous demande de m'expliquer.

[Jean B]

" j'ai consacré du temps , pourquoi vous dîtes ca? " < Il s'est écoulé 1 heure exactement entre le moment où j'ai posté ma correction et le moment où tu as posté ta réponse. Tu appelles ça "consacrer du temps" ? Il faut croire que toi et moi n'avons pas la même notion de ce que signifie exactement l'expression "consacrer du temps".

Déjà, tu ferais preuve d'un minimum d'esprit logique en postant tes corrections en vert, à la rigueur en les laissant en noir, mais surtout pas en rouge.

Relis mes commentaires et réfléchis un peu sur la raison qui m'a amené à mettre tel ou tel mot en rouge.

Et corrige ta ponctuation !

À te lire.

[leamichal]

Bonjour , excusez - moi , je viens de vraiment remarquer que c'était du charabie . J'ai mit mes réponses en violet . J'ai commencer par le premier paragraphe et ensuite quand vous me dîtes tout est ok. Je vous mettrais au propre en violet les suivants.Je veux vraiment comprendre mes erreurs et de les plus faire .. . Comprenez - moi s'il vous plait . J'ai voulu changer les couleur mais je savais pas c'était ou du coup c'était pour cela que je mettais en gras en rouge . 

 

This document is an article of Essential Summer TV written text by Jessica Jeffries - Britten and translated  by Tara Swann. This article consists the five series of Netflix to watch during the holidays. To begin, the first serie is Stranger Things. In the photo, there are three characters, these are Joyce, Max and Will Byers. Stranger Things is an American science fiction horror series created, written  and directed by the Duffer Brothers. The first season is released in July 2016. The story Strange Thing is set in the fictional rural town of Hawkins, Indiana, during the early 1980s. it tells the story of a child lost in a parallel world, filled with monsters, his(her) friends thus try to find him(it) and will cross(meet) in their path(way) Eleven, a girl telekinesis <---je sais qu'en francais c'est télékinésie je ne sais pas comment on dit en francais , all this takes place in the year 80 .

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour, excusez moi, je viens de vraiment remarquer que c'était du charabia . J'ai mis mes réponses en violet. J'ai commencé par le premier paragraphe et ensuite quand vous me dites tout est OK. Je vous mettrai au propre en violet les suivants. Je veux vraiment comprendre mes erreurs et ne plus les  faire .. . Comprenez moi s'il vous plait. J'ai voulu changer les couleurs mais je ne savais pas où c'était ou du coup c'est pour cela que je mettais en gras en rouge. 

Outre les fautes de grammaire et conjugaison du français, tu persistes à mettre une ponctuation erronée, exactement comme si je ne t'en avais jamais fait la remarque. C'est désespérant !

This document is an article of Essential Summer TV written text by Jessica Jeffries - Britten and translated  by Tara Swann. This article consists the of five series of Netflix to watch during the holidays. To begin, the first series is Stranger Things. In the photo, there are three characters, these who are Joyce, Max and Will Byers. Stranger Things is an American science fiction horror series created, written  and directed by the Duffer Brothers. The first season is was released in July 2016. The story Strange Thing is set in the fictional rural town of Hawkins, Indiana, during the early 1980s. It tells the story of a child lost in a parallel world, filled with monsters, his(her) < L'enfant en question est de l'un ou l'autre sexe, pas des 2 en même temps et moi je n'en sais rien. Ou il est masculin, ou il est féminin !   friends thus try to find him(it) < Idem, mais en pire ! and on the way they will meet Eleven, a telekinetic girl,  all this takes place in the 80's.  < Déjà vu avant.

Pour être tout à fait clair et sans vouloir te décourager, tu perds ton temps et me fais perdre le mien en continuant de poster ton travail ici tant que tu n'auras pas comblé tes lacunes sur la grammaire de base.

Comme je te l'ai déjà conseillé, inscris-toi sur https://www.anglaisfacile.com/, c'est gratuit, et mets à profit toutes ses ressources en y travaillant assidûment. En alternance et/ou pour éviter la saturation ou la monotonie, tu peux également travailler sur http://www.e-anglais.com/ dans les mêmes conditions.

Ces 2 sites sont bien faits et si tu y consacres quelques heures par semaine, tu te remettras à niveau en quelques mois. Dans la perspective du baccalauréat, c'est indispensable.

Bon courage et bon travail.  

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Même si je te ne rends pas service en faisant ça, tu trouveras ci-dessous la suite de ton texte remis en anglais correct.

Then the second series is Bojack Horseman. On the photo, we can see two characters : Bojack Horseman and Cat Girl. Bojack Horseman is a television series of American animation which was created by Raphael Bob Waksberg and which has been on Netflix since August 22nd, 2014. He was  a celebrity in the 1990's, yet 20 years later he has become a disillusioned alcoholic. It is the series of animation that deals with people who suffer from depression or psychological disorders and try to communicate. Although Bojack Horseman has everything he wants, he has even a house in Hollywood and women, he is certainly very depressive.

In the picture we can see two characters. The series Master of None is an American television series created by Aziz Ansari and Alan Yang and released on November 6th 2015. The title of the series is based on the English expression " Jack of all trades, Master's degree of none ", making a reference for one person having multiple skills but without specific talent for none. The story tells the commonplace everyday life of thirty-year old Dev, an actor for advertisements who lives in New York.

In the photo there is a man and  the background represents winter. Fargo is an American television series of anthology created by Noah Hawley and released on April 15th, 2014. It is based on the movie of the same name that was released in 1996, written and realized by Joel and Ethan Coen brothers, the producers of the series.

Every episode begins with "This is a true story" but in reality this mention is a wink to the movie Fargo and has for unique purpose to deceive viewers.

In the photo there are 5 characters. Misfits is a British television series created by Howard Overman and released on November 12th, 2009. Five young teenagers have been condemned to carry out some community work. They are going to know who has powers and also know that they are not the only ones to change. Following a murder they will have to hide but it is the moment when the mess starts.

I think I had already watched the series Stranger Things which I liked a lot. Finally I found pleasure in describing this article.