Myths and heroes

[manooon4]

Bonjour, vous serait il possible de corriger ma notion pour le Bac? 
Merci d'avance pour votre aide ! 

 

MYTHS AND HEROES

The notion I am going to talk about is the notion of myths and heroes. We can define an hero as someone who does extraordinary things and usually considers the others as more important than himself. A myth is a story which told from generation to generation. People can become myths if they stay in people's minds. Now, I will talk about slaves who dared.

 

The question I would like to ask is: To what extent can slaves become myths and heroes?

 

To begin with, I will speak about slavery and then I will talk about some slaves who become heroes and myths thanks to their actions.

 

First of all, I want to explain quickly what was slavery in America. Slavery begun in the sixteenth century. Egyptians invented slavery and twenty five to thirty million people were deported. Many millions of African died on slave ships or in wars and raids because the life's conditions were frightful. Indeed, slaves were used to exploit land, and gold and sliver mines.  

I would like to speak more about the "Middle passage". Slaves are crammed in the boat, they couldn't stand up because the roof was low during the journey between Africa and America. When they survived they were sold to plantation in the West Indies or the southern colonies of America, where they spent the rest of their lives working on cotton or coffee plantation. The slave-produced goods were shipped back to Britain. The slave trade brought in huge amounts of money to Britain.

 

Moreover, some slaves dared to rise up. Thanks to their actions they became myths and heroes for the others slaves.

Indeed, in class we saw Olaudah Equiano' story. He was a former slave who published his life story in 1789. He explained that, it was common for slave to be brand with the initial letter of the master's name and for heavy iron hooks to be hung around their necks. Iron muzzles and thumbscrews were also used on slaves. To finish, Equiano reported, I have seen a negro beaten till some of his bones were broken for even letting a pot boil over. To my mind, Equiano was an hero because he overcame his fears and today he's a myth because he decided to unveil the truth about slavery conditions.

 

In addition to Equiano, there were other slaves who dared. For example Harriet Tubman. She saved three hundred slaves over the span of eleven years. For example Harriet Tubman. She saved three hundred slaves over the span of eleven years. She feared she would be sold away from her family in 1849, because she was seen as a sickly person. She escaped thanks to the underground rail rood, so she was a runaway. She was a respect woman because she escaped twice, the first time with her brothers and then a second time.

Barack Obama named her an American hero. She was also a hero because she was successful in leading slaver to the North. She sacrificed her own life to rescue others. 

 

To conclude, in 1865 there was the abolition of slavery. Since this date, slaves are become heroes, and more than heroes if they decided to overcome their fears and helped the others slaves like Harriet. They became myths because their stories are know all over the world.

This notion makes me think about this notion makes me wonder if: Can other non-slave people be heroes? [Arnaud Beltrame, military, attacks, March 24th, he decided to take the place of hostages in the supermarket] entre crochet ce n'est que des notes.

 

Bonne journée. 

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Il y a 5 heures, manooon4 a dit :

Bonjour, vous serait il possible de corriger ma notion pour le bac? 
Merci d'avance pour votre aide ! 

 

MYTHS AND HEROES

The notion I am going to talk about is the notion of myths and heroes. We can define an < le h est aspiré > hero as someone who does extraordinary things and usually considers the others as more important than himself. A myth is a story which is told from generation to generation. People can become myths if they stay in people's minds. Now, I will talk about slaves who dared.  < qui ont osé quoi faire ? dare est un verbe transitif qui a donc besoin de s'appuyer sur un COD.

The question I would like to ask is: To what extent can slaves become myths and heroes?

To begin with, I will speak about slavery and then I will talk about some slaves who became heroes and myths thanks to their actions.

First of all, I want to explain quickly what was slavery in America. Slavery began in the sixteenth century. < Serais-tu en délicatesse avec les verbes irréguliers ? Il faut les connaître tous parfaitement, donc sans la moindre hésitation et sous leurs trois formes. Egyptians invented slavery and twenty five to thirty million people were deported. Many millions of < C'est un pluriel, non ? > Africans died on slave ships or in wars and raids because the life's their living conditions were frightful. Indeed, slaves were used to exploit land and gold and sliver mines.  

I would like to speak more about the "Middle passage". Slaves are were crammed in the boat, they couldn't stand up because the roof was low during the journey between Africa and America. When they survived they were sold to plantations in the West Indies or the southern colonies of America where they spent the rest of their lives working on cotton or coffee plantation. The slave-produced goods were shipped back to Britain. The slave trade brought in huge amounts of money to Britain.

Moreover, some slaves dared to rise up. < Hé ben voilà ! Thanks to their actions they became myths and heroes for the others slaves.

Indeed, in class we saw Olaudah Equiano' story. He was a former slave who published his life story in 1789. He explained that it was common for a slave to be branded with the initial letter of the master's name and for heavy iron hooks to be hung around their necks. Iron muzzles and thumbscrews were also used on slaves. To finish, Equiano reported, I have seen a negro beaten till some of his bones were broken for even letting a pot boil over. To my mind, Equiano was an  hero because he overcame his fears and today he's a myth because he decided to unveil the truth about slavery conditions.

In addition to Equiano, there were other slaves who dared. < Et rebelote ! For example Harriet Tubman. She saved three hundred slaves over the span of eleven years. < Only once, please! > For example Harriet Tubman. She saved three hundred slaves over the span of eleven years. She feared she would be sold away from her family in 1849 because she was seen as a sickly person. She escaped thanks to the underground railroad, so she was a runaway. She was a respected woman because she escaped twice, the first time with her brothers and then a second time.

Barack Obama named her an American hero. She was also a hero because she was successful in leading slaves to the North. She sacrificed her own life to rescue others. 

To conclude, in 1865 there was the abolition of slavery. Since this date, slaves are < Aïe, la grammaire ! >  have become heroes and more than heroes if they decided to overcome their fears and helped the others < Il a fonction d'adjectif ici = INVARIABLE slaves like Harriet. They became myths because their stories are known < Encore un irrégulier ! all over the world.

This notion makes me think about this notion makes me wonder whether/if other non-slave people can be heroes. < Que tu le veuilles ou pas, c'est une interrogation indirecte qui doit donc respecter la formulation d'une phrase déclarative/affirmative. [Arnaud Beltrame, military, attacks, March 24th, he decided to take the place of hostages in the supermarket] entre crochet ce n'est que des notes.

Bonne journée.

Relis-toi toujours attentivement, ne serait-ce que pour éliminer toi-même certaines répétitions.

[manooon4]

Bonjour, desolée pour les répétitions je ne comprend, elle n'apparaissaient pas dans mon documents word. Surement une erreur lors du copier coller.

Pour le verbe dared, dans plusieurs de mes phrases je ne met rien derrière tout simplement parce que nous l'avons vu et utilisé comme cela en cours ! 

Merci pour votre correction !

[Jean B]

Il y a 1 heure, manooon4 a dit :

Pour le verbe dared, dans plusieurs de mes phrases je ne met rien derrière tout simplement parce que nous l'avons vu et utilisé comme cela en cours ! 

How dare you!

[manooon4]

Je ne voulais pas vous offenser, même si j'ai très bien compris votre plaisanterie haha ! Est ce que cela se fait tout de même de ne rien mettre derrière? En français nous pouvons l'utiliser tout simplement mais ne sait ce pas enfaîte un abus de langage? 

Je vous remercie encore une fois pour votre aide ! Vous êtes d'une grande aide pour tout le monde, continuez ainsi ! 

[Jean B]

Rassure-toi, tu ne m'as pas offensé ; je n'ai simplement pas pu résister à la tentation avec "dare" !

Merci pour le compliment, d'autant plus précieux qu'il se fait rare sur le forum.