Rédaction voyage scolaire

[sarah23000]

Bonjour je doit raconter mon voyage scolaire en anglais et le lire devant toute la classe. Je ne suis très bonne en anglais donc est ce qu'il y aurait quelqu'un de assez doué pour m'aider.

Merci d'avance.

We left at 4:30 am from Paris for Mardrid. This photo was taken on a highway area in spain. On Thursday morning, we went to school with our correspondent. And in the afternoon, we went to wanda metropolitano with our correspondent and our friends and their correspondents. It's a football stadium where there was a match that night. On Friday morning we went to visit a small part of the city and then went to the Prado Museum. On Saturday Sarah and I ate at her correspondent's family meal. Then in the evening we went to the ice rink. And after to the hospital with the parents of my correspondent and Sarah. In the evening, I ate with Sarah her correspondent and mine. On Sundays Solen, Sarah, me and all our correspondents with their families went to Madrid by metro. We ate at McDonald's. Then we went to Primark, Tiger, Starbuck and La Casa del Libros. In the evening, on our return, we ate churros. On Monday we went to the Reina Sofia Museum. We ate in the train station that looked like the jungle. In the afternoon we visited the Bernabeu football stadium. On Tuesday we were visited "El Valle de los Caidos" in the rain. On Wednesday we left Madrid to Barcelona. We arrived in barcelona at 8 pm and we joined our families. On Thursdays we visited the Sagrada Familia with a guide who was very good. And in the afternoon we went to Parc Guell which was very beautiful with all its colors. And unfortunately, we left Barcelona for Paris but before leaving we stopped at the football stadium "camp nou". We arrived in Paris at 18:30.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Il y a 1 heure, sarah23000 a dit :

Bonjour je doit raconter mon voyage scolaire en anglais et le lire devant toute la classe. Je ne suis très bonne en anglais donc est ce qu'il y aurait quelqu'un de assez doué pour m'aider.

Merci d'avance.

We left at 4:30 A.M. from Paris for Madrid. This photo was taken on a highway area in spain. < Majuscule à tous les noms de pays, sans exception On Thursday morning, we went to school with our correspondent. And in the afternoon, we went to wanda metropolitano < Idem pour tous les noms propres with our correspondent and our friends and their correspondents. It's a football stadium where there was a match that night. On Friday morning we went to visit a small part of the city and then went to the Prado Museum. On Saturday Sarah and I ate at her correspondent's family meal. Then in the evening we went to the ice rink and after later to the hospital with the parents of my correspondent and Sarah. < Tu ne peux pas commencer une phrase par une conjonction de coordination telle que and. Au delà de la faute grammaticale,  c'est contraire au bon sens. In the evening, I ate with Sarah her correspondent and mine. On Sundays Solen, Sarah, me and all our correspondents with their families went to Madrid by the metro. We ate at McDonald's. Then we went to Primark, Tiger, Starbuck and La Casa del Libros. In the evening, on our return, we ate churros. On Monday we went to visited the Reina Sofia Museum. We ate in the train station that looked like the jungle. In the afternoon we visited the Bernabeu football stadium. On Tuesday we were visited < prétérit simple pour toute action passée, terminée, coupée du présent "El Valle de los Caidos" in the rain. On Wednesday we left Madrid to Barcelona. We arrived in barcelona at 8 pm and we joined our families. On Thursdays we visited the Sagrada Familia with a guide who was very good. And in the afternoon we went to Parc Guell which was < Il est encore très beau après ton départ, c'est un état permanent = présent > is very beautiful with all its colors. And Unfortunately, we left Barcelona for Paris but before leaving we stopped at the football stadium "camp nou". We arrived in Paris at 18:30 6.30 P.M. < Souviens-toi que les anglais expriment l'heure sur 2 x 12. D'ailleurs, tu l'as bien écrite au tout début de ton texte.

À part une bévue sur le prétérit, je n'ai relevé aucune faute réellement grave.

Rectifie ce que j'ai balisé en rouge et annoté en violet et bonne chance pour ta prochaine entrée au lycée.

[sarah23000]

merci beaucoup pour votre aide