Raconter mon halloween

[nepenthes]

Bonjour,

Je suis en seconde et je dois raconter mon halloween en anglais.

Pouvez vous vérifier que mon texte est correct ?

Vous en remerciant par avance.

Halloween night, I disguised myself as a witch with a broom and I had a wig with long black hair.

I put on make-up by putting black around my eyes and a fake witch's nose. 

I celebrated halloween at a friend's house.

his house looked like a haunted house .

Everyone was disguised as a witch, ghost, skeleton, vampire ...
there was really scary disguises ! 

The house was decorated with spider webs, pumpkins and there was a lot of candy.

We had a lot of fun.

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjour,

Je suis en seconde et je dois raconter mon Halloween en anglais.

Pouvez-vous vérifier que mon texte est correct ?

Vous en remerciant par avance.

On Halloween night, I disguised myself dressed up as a witch with a broom and I had a wig with long black hair. < Préposition "on" à employer devant un évènement précis ou une date précise.

I put on some black make-up by putting black around my eyes and a fake witche's nose. 

I celebrated Halloween at a friend's house.

His house looked like a haunted house.

Everyone was disguised had dressed up as a witch, a ghost, a skeleton, a vampire... < Le past perfect pour marquer l'antériorité.

There was were really scary disguises costumes/fancy dresses! < Il faut accorder le verbe au nombre du sujet, i.e. le  pluriel.

The house was decorated with spider webs, pumpkins and there was were lots of candy candies. < On peut compter les bonbons, c'est donc un nom dénombrable = pluriel.

We had a lot of fun.

Attention à l'usage du dictionnaire : les nom et verbe "disguise" n'ont pas exactement la même acception que le français "déguisement/déguiser".

Sois plus attentive et bonne continuation.

 

 

 

 

[nepenthes]

Bonjour,

Je vous remercie pour votre correction et vos commentaires.

J'en ai pris bonne note.