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Bonjour ! 

Je dois faire un travail sur le film Erin Brockovich. Je doit parler du personnage principal  (erin). Je doit faire un paragraphe par thème donné. Pouvez-vous me le corriger ? 

Marital status: Erin Brockovich is single, she's got tree children. She is less job. Maybe, she is thirteen years old. She has two ex-husband but they dont't help for educate children.

Children: She as got tree children. The first children, he is eight old, his name is Matthew. The second children, she is soon six years and her name is Katie. The last children her name is Elizabeth and she is nine month.

Education: Erin tries to raise the children at best. She sacrifies for to eat their children, she prefers not eat for eating her children. She went available for their children.

Work experience: In the beginning, in the film, she look for a job, she has a job interview but she did not a qualification and a skill for the job. She has job in the lawyer who took care of his lawsuit.

Money Matters: She is poor, she has only seventy two dollars into his bank account. She has 17 000 dollars in debt after the accident because she low a case.

Merci de votre aide ! ;)

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Bonjour,

Il y a 3 heures, coco17170 a dit :

Bonjour ! 

Je dois faire un travail sur le film Erin Brockovich. Je dois parler du personnage principal, Erin. Je dois faire un paragraphe par thème donné. Pouvez-vous me le corriger ? 

Marital status: Erin Brockovich is single, she's got three children. She is less job unemployed/ She has no job. Maybe, she is thirteen years old. << ???  Elle est née le 22 juin 1960, donc ? She has had two ex-husbands but they dont didn't help for to educate children. << À la lecture de ce qui précède, j'ai la désagréable certitude que tu n'as même pas pris la peine de chercher son CV sur internet. Ce n'est pourtant pas difficile.

Le chiffre 3 s'orthographie three // tree c'est un arbre ! :rolleyes:

1 child vs 2 children, pluriel irrégulier

* Tu mélanges les temps sans te soucier de la moindre cohérence.

* Il n'y a pas de double sujet en anglais, ça n'existe pas.

* -s final au présent simple d'un verbe dont le sujet est au singulier, on apprend ça dès la sixième au collège.

* Tu confonds be et have, un comble !

* Un adjectif possessif doit être accordé en genre avec le possesseur.

* Bref, je me demande ce que tu sais des règles élémentaires de l'anglais...

https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Erin_Brockovich,_seule_contre_tous

https://citoyennes.pressbooks.com/chapter/erin-brockovich-etats-unis/

Erin Brockovich

Conseiller juridique

Erin Brockovich-Ellis est une autodidacte, devenue adjointe juridique et militante de l'environnement, connue pour avoir révélé une affaire de pollution des eaux potables à Hinkley. Wikipédia

Date et lieu de naissance : 22 juin 1960 (56 ans), Lawrence, Kansas, États-Unis

Taille : 1,77 m

Films et programmes TV : Erin Brockovich, seule contre tous, Final Justice with Erin Brockovich

Enfants : Katie Brown, Matthew Brown, Elizabeth Brockovich

Époux : Eric L. Ellis (m. 1999), Steven Brockovich (m. 1989–1990), Shawn Brown (m. 1982–1987)

 

Children: She as got tree children. The first children, he is eight old, his name is Matthew. The second children, she is soon six years and her name is Katie. The last children her name is Elizabeth and she is nine month.

Education: Erin tries to raise the children at best. She sacrifies for to eat their children, she prefers not eat for eating her children. She went available for their children.

Work experience: In the beginning, in the film, she look for a job, she has a job interview but she did not a qualification and a skill for the job. She has job in the lawyer who took care of his lawsuit.

Money Matters: She is poor, she has only seventy two dollars into his bank account. She has 17 000 dollars in debt after the accident because she low a case.

Merci de votre aide ! ;)

 

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Merci de votre réponse. C'est que je doit faire sur le personnage dans le film et non la vrai personne. Elle a 30 ans dans le film (j'avais mis 13 au départ, je me suis trompé). Je viens de corrigé la première partie et corrigé les child et children sur les autres textes (que vous m'avez gentiment corrigé). Pouvez-vous me corriger les autres paragraphes pour voir mes erreurs ? Merci de votre aide.

Marital status: Erin Brockovich is single, she's got three children. She as no job. Maybe, she is thirty years old.  She had two ex-husbands but they didn't help to educate children.

Children: She as got tree children. The first child, he is eight old, his name is Matthew. The second child, she is soon six years and her name is Katie. The last child her name is Elizabeth and she is nine month.

Education: Erin tries to raise the children at best. She sacrifies for to eat their children, she prefers not eat for eating her children. She went available for their children.

Work experience: In the beginning, in the film, she look for a job, she has a job interview but she did not a qualification and a skill for the job. She has job in the lawyer who took care of his lawsuit.

Money Matters: She is poor, she has only seventy two dollars into his bank account. She has 17 000 dollars in debt after the accident because she low a case.

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Merci de votre réponse. C'est que je doit faire sur le personnage dans le film et non la vrai personne. Elle a 30 ans dans le film (j'avais mis 13 au départ, je me suis trompé). Je viens de corrigé la première partie et corrigé les child et children sur les autres textes (que vous m'avez gentiment corrigé). Pouvez-vous me corriger les autres paragraphes pour voir mes erreurs ? Merci de votre aide.

Tu as carrément saboté ta "correction", ce n'est pas sérieux. :angry:

Marital status: Erin Brockovich is single, she's got three children. She as no job. Maybe, she is thirty years old.  She had two ex-husbands but they didn't help to educate children.

Children: She as :rolleyes: got tree :rolleyes: children.<< En voici 2 preuves !!!  The first child, he is eight years old, his name is Matthew. The second child, she is will soon be six years and her name is Katie. The last child's her name is Elizabeth and she is nine months old.

Education: Erin tries to raise the children at best. She sacrifices for to eat their to feed her children, she prefers not eat for eating to starve herself to feed her children. She went available for their children.<< Ça n'a aucun sens !

Work experience: In the beginning, in the film, she is looking for a job, she has a job interview but she did not a has neither qualification and a nor skills for the job. She has finally job in gets employed by the lawyer who took care of his her lawsuit.

Money matters: She is poor, she has only seventy two dollars into his :rolleyes: her  bank account. She has is 17 000 dollars in debt after the accident because she low lost a her case.

Étant donné que tu n'es même pas capable de suivre mes indications de corrections, je ne vois aucune raison pour continuer à t'aider.

Simple curiosité : en quelle classe es-tu pour produire un anglais aussi mauvais ?

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Bonjour. Merci de votre grande aide. J'ai de grosses lacunes en anglais. Je n'ai jamais était bon. Vous allez avoir peur lorsque je vais vous dire que je suis en première. 

Cette été, je vais beaucoup bosser l'anglais et revoir vraiment les bases. Connaissez-vous un "programme" a suivre ou une liste de leçon avec des cours et exos avec ce qu'il faut savoir ?

Merci par avance.

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