Écrire une histoire

[lili33331]

Bonjour, je dois écrire une histoire en anglais et je ne sais pas si c'est juste:

 

Once upon a time, a woman who was called Kate. As usual, she was cleaning the house. While she was raising a dust on her husband’s desk, there were a mysterious letter by him. She hesitated to open it because she had a lot of respect for her husband. She was wondering about this letter and it’s content : “ Why is there a letter ? Is it for me ? Why would it be for me ? Have I to open it ?”

She sat on the chair which was not fair. Finally, she decided to open it. She began to read it :

“Dear Kate,

 

I have so many things to say to you that I don’t know how to begin.

First of all, you’re the best thing happened in my life. The first time where I see you,I just knew that you were the one that I've always needed.”

 

Kate smiled.

 

“When I get married with you, I was the happier of the world. But, for some time, you seem to be unhappy and I don’t really know if it’s because of me. Maybe that it is because I travel every time around the world, or maybe it is because you’re not in love me ? I am in doubt. I’ve been giving a great deal of thought to our relationship but the idea of divorce is not possible. I don’t want to lose you. Write me please.

William.”

Kate stood there. She was shocked. She took a piece of paper and begin to write:

“ Dear William,

I read your letter and I am shocked. I’m unhappy because you travel every time around the world. How can you believe that I am not in love with you. I am in love with you. I just want you to be with me longer. I need to be with you. As you, I don’t want to divorce. I never thought of that before.

With love, Kate”

A few days later, Kate received a letter from William :

“Dear Kate,

Your letter reassured me. I’m going to stop working around the world and to find another job close to home to stay every time with you. I want you to know that I love you. See you in a week.

William”

Kate realized that speaking of her problems which she meets with her husband is very important and now,she was never going to make this error.

Pourriez vous me ire si il y a des erreurs svp ?

Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

il y a 59 minutes, lili33331 a dit :

Bonjour, je dois écrire une histoire en anglais et je ne sais pas si c'est juste:

 

Once upon a time there was a woman who was called Kate. As usual, she was cleaning the house. While she was raising a << elle ne faisait pas de la poussière, elle l'enlevait >> removing some dust on her husband’s desk, there were was a mysterious letter by him.<<Serais-tu étourdie ? She hesitated to open it because she had a lot of respect for her husband. She was wondering about this letter and it's<<Ce n'est pas la même chose !>> its content : “ Why is there a letter? Is it for me? Why would it be for me? Have I to open it?”

She sat on the chair which was not fair.<< C'est-à-dire ? Finally, she decided to open it. She began to read it :

“Dear Kate,

I have so many things to say to you that I don’t know how to begin.

First of all, you’re the best thing that happened in my life. The first time where<<Ce n'est pas une relation d'espace mais de temps >> when I see << Et alors ?>> saw you, I just knew that you were the one that I've had always needed.”<<Concordance des temps, exactement comme en français.

Kate smiled.

“When I get got married with you,<<Le récit se fait toujours au prétérit, pas de temps en temps seulement ! I was the happier of man in the world. But, for some time, you seem to be 've been looking unhappy to me and I don’t really know if it’s because of me.<<Attention à l'emploi du present perfect avec for / since, à revoir dans ta grammaire. Maybe that it is because I travel every all the time / I keep travelling / around the world, or maybe it is because you’re not in love me? I am in doubt. I’ve been giving a great deal of thought to our relationship but the idea of divorce is not possible. I don’t want to lose you. Write to me please.

William.”

Kate stood there. She was shocked. She took a piece of paper and begin began to write:<<Décidément...

“ Dear William,

I read your letter and I am shocked. I’m unhappy because you travel every time keep travelling around the world. How can you believe that I am not in love with you? I am in love with you. I just want you to be with me longer. I need to be with you. As you, I don’t want to divorce either.<<  = Moi non plus, je ne...  I never thought of that before.

With love, Kate”

A few days later, Kate received a letter from William :

“Dear Kate,

Your letter reassured me. I’m going to stop working around the world, and to <<Sinon on comprend qu'il va arrêter de chercher un nouveau job. find another job close to home to stay every time always with you. I want you to know that I love you. See you in a week.

William”

Kate realized that speaking of her problems (which) she meets met with her husband is was very important and now she was never going to make this error again.<<Revois les règles de concordance des temps, ce n'est pas difficile.

Pourriez vous me dire si s'il y a des erreurs svp SVP ?

Merci d'avance

NB every time = chaque fois (que) // all the time = tout le temps Dictionnaire ?

Il faut absolument te relire pour éliminer certaines fautes par toi même.

[lili33331]

Bonjour, merci pour votre aide.

Bonne soirée.