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[Sonia123]

Bonjour vous pouvez me corriger mon texte que j'ai préparé pour mon oral d'anglais svpp

voici le texte : I'm going to talked about the first débate between clinton and trump. 
First of all I am going to sum up the important messages and informations of this debate :
So in this debate they talked about econmic problems and jobs and Trump made some effective points on economy and jobs and he also said that clinton  doesn't have stamina to solve these problems.
But clinton said Trump's plans would cause a loss of 3 million jobs while hers would create 10million jobs.
And  they talked about many other things Like trump's tax plans ,trump's false story on native contry of Obama , his support for the Irak war,and his bad things about race and women.
But i think the most important thing of this débate is that we must hold back was that how clinton managed this first debate because every one said that Trump Will  easily win this débate and he Will be violent with her in this debate but it was clinton who put in dificult trump during this débate because she delivred a strong performance in which she demonstrated a command of policy and a sense of humor ,similing through some of trump's strongest attacks.
We can see that with this comment : "i think trump criticized me for preparing for this débat" she said : and yes i did and you Know what else i prépared for ? I prépared to be président .

 

[Jean B]

 

Bonjour,

Bon, vu le peu de cas que tu fais de mes corrections, on va jouer au plus têtu !

Les fautes seront désormais juste balisées en rouge pour t'aider à les corriger toi-même avec un peu de réflexion, ta grammaire et ton dictionnaire.

Il y a 3 heures, Sonia123 a dit :

Bonjour vous pouvez me corriger mon texte que j'ai préparé pour mon oral d'anglais svpp

voici le texte : I'm going to talked about the first débate between clinton and trump. 
First of all I am going to sum up the important messages and informations of this debate:
So in this debate they talked about econmic problems and jobs and Trump made some effective points on economy and jobs and he also said that clinton  doesn't have stamina to solve these problems.
But clinton said Trump's plans would cause a loss of 3 million jobs while hers would create 10 million jobs.
And  they talked about many other things Like trump's tax plans, trump's false story on x native contry of Obama, his support for the Irak war and his bad things about race and women.
But i think the most important thing of this débate is that we must hold back was that how clinton managed this first debate because every one said that Trump Will  easily win this débate and he Will be violent with her in this debate but it was clinton who put in dificult trump during this débate because she delivred a strong performance in which she demonstrated a command of policy and a sense of humor, similing through some of trump's strongest attacks.
We can see that with this comment: "i think trump criticized me for preparing for this débat" she said : and yes i did and you Know what else i prépared for? I prépared to be président.

Au travail !

[Sonia123]

: I'm going to talk about the first debate between Clinton and Trump. 
First of all I am going to sum up the important messages and informations of this debate:
So in this debate they talked about economic problems and jobs and Trump made some effective points on economy and jobs and he also said that Clinton  doesn't have stamina to solve these problems.
But Clinton said Trump's plans would cause a loss of 3 million jobs while hers would create 10 million jobs.
And  they talked about many other things like Trump's tax plans, Trump's false story on the native country of Obama, his support for the Irak war and his bad things about race and women.
But I think the most important thing of this debate is that we must hold back is that how Clinton managed this first debate because every one said that Trump will  easily win this debate and he will be violent with her in this debate but it was Clinton who put in dificult Trump during this debate because she delivered a strong performance in which she demonstrated a command of policy and a sense of humor, similing through some of Trump's strongest attacks.
We can see that with this comment: "I think Trump criticized me for preparing for this debat" she said : and yes I did and you know what else I prepared for? I prepared to be president.

j'ai corrigé les fautes mais il y'a des fautes je sais pas comment corriger. SVP help me

[Sonia123]

Vous pouvez me corriger le reste SVP

[Jean B]

Il y a 23 heures, Sonia123 a dit :

: I'm going to talk about the first debate between Clinton and Trump. 
First of all I am going to sum up the important messages and informations<<Est-ce que tu vois clair ? of this debate:
So in this debate they talked about economic problems and jobs and Trump made some effective points on economy and jobs and he also said that Clinton  doesn't have stamina to solve these problems.
But Clinton said Trump's plans would cause a loss of 3 million jobs while hers would create 10 million jobs.
And  they talked about many other things like Trump's tax plans, Trump's false story on the native country of Obama, his support for the Irak war and his bad things about race and women.
But I think the most important thing of this debate is that we must hold back is that remember how Clinton managed this first debate because every one said that Trump will  would easily win this debate and he will be violent with her in this debate but it was Clinton who put Trump in a difficult position during this debate because she delivered a strong performance in which she demonstrated a command of policy and a sense of humor, similing through some of Trump's strongest attacks.<<Quelle phrase ! J'espère que tu as un bon souffle !
We can see that with this comment: "I think Trump criticized me for preparing for this debate" she said : and yes I did and you know what else I prepared for? I prepared to be president.

j'ai corrigé les fautes mais il y a des fautes je sais pas comment corriger. SVP help me

C'est mieux. Comme quoi...

[Sonia123]

Merci beaucoup encore une fois vous êtes vraiment gentil.