Correction notion - Mythes et Héros

[leadillen]

Bonsoir, pouvez-vous corriger le texte que j'ai écrit pour la notion Myths and heroes svp ?

Merci d'avance !

 

Mythes and Heroes

Cons and icons

 

How a character can become a national figure ?

1. History of coins

2. Celebrities on banknotes

3. Example of an hero

 

Introduction :

I am going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. First of all, I’m going to give the definition of a myth and a hero.

A myth is a story that may or may not be true. Mythology includes the legends of our history, our religions, stories of how the world was created, and our heroes. These stories have great symbolic power, so this may be a major reason why they have survived for such a long time, sometimes for thousands of years. A hero is a person who is admired for his courage, achievements, or noble qualities. It can be any character. So we can ask us how a character can become a national figure.

In a first part, we are going to speak about the history of coins, after that, we will talk about celebrities on banknotes, and to finish, we are going to give an example of a character who deserves to appear on.

 

 

1. History of coins

To my mind the document that best seems to illustrate the first part is “The History of the British Pound”. In fact, it’s told that Henry VII issued the pound coin in 1489 to unify the country. The pound sterling was born 1200 years ago and is considered as the oldest currency in the world. We can found the pound sterling in different parts of the United Kingdom like in Northern Ireland, The Isle of Man and others. The design is different depending on where the money was printed but accepted throughout the United Kingdom.

Queen Elizabeth II appears on all coins’ “face” side and represent the monarchy. She is looking on the right, which symbolize the stability of the British Monarchy. On the “tail” side, different elements like the thistle or the Lion represent some region of the UK. The crown holds all the regions of the UK together which represents the power, the domination and unify the British Monarchy.

 

 

1. Celebrities on banknotes

In this second part, we will describe banknotes using the "British currency" document. So, on the first side, we can see Queen Elizabeth II, the name of the Bank, the value of the banknote and security features. On the second side, we can see different famous people depending on the banknote’s value. For example, Elizabeth Fry, a social reformer from the XVIII th century, and who improved the situation of female prisoners and homeless people, appears on 5£ banknotes. We can also find others well-known people with a few illustrations related to their life like Charles Darwin, James Watt or Adam Smith.

All these people have somehow contributed to make evolve the Britain

1. Example of an hero who deserve to be on banknotes

Diana Spencer, Princess of Wales, was the first wife of Charles, Prince of Wales. She was an incredible women and I think she is the perfect women to become the next face on 20£ banknotes.

It’s in the middle 80s that Lady Di starting to take seriously her role as an ambassador of several associations. The princess is depicted as a leading celebrities interested by diseases such as AIDS and leprosy.

By its status, Lady Di was so expected in hospitals, schools, and museums. She became one of the first public figures to touch the HIV patients, proving the world that they are absolutely not contagious. She helped poor children in Africa and was alongside many personalities such as Nelson Mandela, Mother Teresa and the Dalai Lama. I’m sure that everybody remember her.

I think Diana Spencer was a truly remarkable woman. So I’m sure that put her face on 20£ banknotes is the best way to honor her and leave a trace of her existence and of what she has done.

 

Conclusion :

        To conclude, a character can be a national figure and appear on banknotes for her achievements or qualities. The British currency unifies the country and allowing his heroes to be honored. Lady Di is a well-known personality and she is considered like an hero, so I think she could be on banknotes.

 

[Jean B]

 

Bonjour,

Le 24/04/2016 at 20:24, leadillen a dit :

Bonsoir, pouvez-vous corriger le texte que j'ai écrit pour la notion Myths and heroes svp ?

Merci d'avance !

 

Mythes and Heroes

Cons and icons

 

How can a character can become a national figure? <Revois l'ordre des mots d'une question

1. History of coins

2. Celebrities on banknotes

3. Example of an hero < Le h est aspiré

 

Introduction :

I am going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. First of all, I’m going to give the definition of a myth and a hero.

A myth is a story that may or may not be true. Mythology includes the legends of our history, our religions, stories of how the world and our heroes were created, and our heroes. These stories have great symbolic power, so this may be a major reason why they have survived for such a long time, sometimes for thousands of years. A hero is a person who is admired for his courage, achievements, or noble qualities. It can be any character. So we can ask us ourselves / wonder how a character can become a national figure.

In a first part, we are going to speak about the history of coins, after that, we will talk about celebrities on banknotes, and to finish, we are going to will give an example of a character who deserves to appear on them.

 

 

1. History of coins

To my mind the document that best seems to illustrate the first part is “The History of the British Pound”. In fact, it’s we're told that Henry VII issued the pound coin in 1489 to unify the country. The pound sterling was born 1200 years ago and is considered regarded as the oldest currency in the world. We can found  find < Base verbale derrière un modal the pound sterling in different various parts of the United Kingdom like in Northern Ireland, The Isle of Man and others. The design is different depending on where the money was printed but accepted throughout the United Kingdom. < Sache faire la différence entre les adjectifs "different " et " various " car tu commets cette erreur plusieurs fois. Vérifie dans le dictionnaire.

Queen Elizabeth II appears on all coins’ “face” side < Génitif grammaticalement impossible obverse and represents  the monarchy. She is looking on the right, which symbolizes  the stability of the British Monarchy. On the “tail” side  reverse different various elements like the thistle or the Lion represent some regions of the UK. The crown holds all the regions of the UK together, which represents the power, the domination and unify the British Monarchy. < Si tu n'écris pas le -s final du présent simple dont le sujet est singulier (" élémentaire mon cher Watson ") tu ne le prononceras pas et ce sera remarqué en tant que faute. Sois-y attentive.

 

 

1. Celebrities on banknotes

In this second part, we will describe banknotes using the "British currency" document. So, on the first side, we can see Queen Elizabeth II, the name of the Bank, the value of the banknote and security features. On the second side / back, we can see different various famous people depending on the banknote’s < Perseverare diabolicum value. For example, Elizabeth Fry, a social reformer from the XVIII th century, and who improved the situation of female prisoners and homeless people, appears on 5£ banknotes. We can also find others  < Adjectif INVARIABLE ! well-known people with a few illustrations related to their lives like Charles Darwin, James Watt or Adam Smith.

All these people have somehow contributed to make evolve the bring about some change in Britain

1. Example of an hero who deserves to be on banknotes  < Et rebelote pour les 2 !

Diana Spencer, Princess of Wales, was the first wife of Charles, Prince of Wales. She was an incredible woman and I think she is the perfect women  < Bis ! to become the next face on 20£ banknotes.

It’s in the middle 80s that Lady Di startinged to take seriously her role play a leading part as an ambassador of for several associations. The princess is depicted as a leading celebritiesy interested by < Comment peux-tu employer un pluriel après un article singulier ? Tu ne te relis donc jamais ? who took an interest in diseases such as AIDS and leprosy.

By its  < Alors là, bravo  !  Through her status, Lady Di was also expected in hospitals, schools and museums. She became one of the first public figures to touch the HIV patients, proving the world that they are absolutely not contagious. She helped poor children in Africa and was alongside many personalities such as Nelson Mandela, Mother Teresa and the Dalai Lama. I’m sure that everybody remembers  her.

I think Diana Spencer was a truly remarkable woman. So I’m sure that putting her face on 20£ banknotes is the best way to honor her and leave a trace of her existence and of what she has done. < Seul un gérondif (v-ing) peut prendre la fonction sujet.

 

 

Conclusion :

        To conclude, a character can be a national figure and appear on banknotes for their / her achievements or qualities. The British currency unifies the country and allowings  his  its heroes to be honored. Lady Di is was a well-known personality and so she is can be considered like looked upon as / regarded as an  hero, so I think she could be on banknotes.

Le nombre de fois où j'ai jugé utile d'attirer ton attention  par une émoticône fâchée devrait t'interpeller. Prends l'habitude de te relire car le jour de l'examen personne ne le fera à ta place. Bonne chance pour ton oral.

 

 

[leadillen]

Merci pour cette correction.