Correction Spaces and Exchanges

[Lebailly]

Bonjour ou bonsoir j'aurais besoin d'une correction pour la première partie de ma notion espaces et échanges. Merci d'avance

I’m going to talk about the notion of Spaces and exchanges. I'm going to use a few documents that deal with spaces and exchanges. This notion deals with the geographical and symbolic areas that all societies occupy and the interactions between men and different societies. Our world is built on the exploration and conquest of new spaces. The different spaces of the world are nowadays more and more connected to each other. The exchanged can appear on many forms: people, trade or media. The immigration is linked to this notion as it implies the motion of legal and illegal people to other countries. Trade, emigration, wars and disasters have influenced the world as we know it today.

What are the reasons of immigration?

First I’m going to explain why the migrants immigrate and in the second time we will see has what the immigrants expect and what they bring to the countries receivers

I-We are going to deal with immigration and the fact that the immigrants think that life is better on the other side of the elsewhere hoping for a better life and future. Throughout the story, people have stayed to escape their country, to flee. Quite a number of reasons. Most of the time, people hope to find a better life elsewhere. They may leave because they are not enough job or opportunity, in their country. They may also want to avoid persecution for political, religious, racial. People are sometime obliged to run away from their country because there is the civil war or revolution. Sometime it’s matter of life and death as. There are several types of migration:

Economic migration for moving to find work or follow a particular career path. We can make a link between the notion and the picture study in the class. The document shows Chinese immigrants panning for gold in California during the gold rush after 1849. The vast majority of Chinese immigrants were men. They emigrated for economic reasons, there was widespread poverty in China resulting largely from British policy regarding opium.

Political migration for moving to escape political persecution or war. We can make a link between the notion and the picture study in the class. The document is a photo taken on a freeway in San Diego, near the Mexican border. The signs still exist but were first erected in the 1990s when a lot of Mexicans trying to enter the USA illegally would run across the freeway trying to escape from border guards, without looking traffic. Many were killed by drivers who could not stop in time. Since then, these ”caution” signs have been used by both pro-immigrant and anti-immigrant groups in their various campaigns on t-shirt, poster…

Both pictures illustrate the belief, held by many who are living in difficult circumstances, that things will be better if they move to a different place.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I’m going to talk about the notion of Spaces and exchanges. I'm going to use a few documents that deal with spaces and exchanges. This notion deals with the geographical and symbolic areas that all societies occupy and the interactions between men and different various societies. Our world is built on the exploration and conquest of new spaces. The different various spaces of the world are nowadays more and more connected to each other. The exchanged Exchanges can appear on in many forms: people, trade or media. The immigration is linked to this notion as it implies the motion of legal and illegal people to other countries. Trade, emigration, wars and disasters have influenced the world as we know it today.

What are the reasons of immigration?

First I’m going to explain why the migrants people immigrate and in the second time we will see has what the immigrants expect and what they bring to the countries receivers host countries.

 

I-We are going to deal with immigration and the fact that the immigrants think that life is better on the other side of the elsewhere hoping for a better life and future. Throughout the story history, people have stayed tried to escape their countries, to flee. Quite a number of reasons. Most of the time, people hope to find a better life elsewhere. They may leave because they there are not enough jobs or opportunities in their countries. They may also want to avoid persecution for political, religious, racial reasons. People are sometime obliged to run away from their countries because there is the civil war or revolution. Sometimes it’s a matter of life and death as. There are several types of migration:

 

Economic migration for moving to find work or follow a particular career path. We can make a link between the notion and the picture study studied in the class. The document shows Chinese immigrants panning for gold in California during the gold rush after 1849. The vast majority of Chinese immigrants were men. They emigrated for economic reasons, there was widespread poverty in China resulting largely from British policy regarding opium.

 

Political migration for moving to escape political persecution or war. We can make a link between the notion and the picture study studied in the class. The document is a photo taken on a freeway in San Diego, near the Mexican border. The signs still exist but were first erected in the 1990s when a lot of Mexicans trying to enter the USA illegally would run across the freeway trying to escape from border guards, without looking at the traffic. Many were killed by drivers who could not stop in time. Since then, these ”caution” signs have been used by both pro-immigrant and anti-immigrant groups in their various campaigns on t-shirts, posters…

 

Both pictures illustrate the belief, held by many who are living in difficult circumstances, that things will be better if they move to a different place.

 

D'une fois à l'autre, j'éprouve la déception grandissante de devoir corriger des fautes déjà corrigées et dûment explicitées.

Telles que je les pratique, mes corrections doivent au contraire te permettre de progresser mais visiblement tu n'en tiens pas compte. Attention, je n'ai pas la moindre vocation d'ermite pour prêcher dans le désert.

- emplois intempestifs du déterminant "the"

- différence de sens, donc d'emploi, entre different et various

- mise au pluriel d'un nom qui est commun à plusieurs sujets : people/immigrants =>>> countries

- dans un nom composé de nom + nom, celui des 2 qui a valeur de qualifiant se place naturellement AVANT : =>>> host countries

[Lebailly]

Merci beaucoup j'arrive de plus en plus à corriger mes fautes grâce à vous mais il en reste encore pas mal encore merci

[Jean B]

Il y a 2 heures, Lebailly a dit :

Merci beaucoup j'arrive de plus en plus à corriger mes fautes grâce à vous mais il en reste encore pas mal encore merci

Le Ciel t'entende !

[Jean B]

Il y a 2 heures, Lebailly a dit :

Il y a 1 heure Lebailly a dit :

Bonjour ou bon soir j'aurais besoin d'une correction s'il vous plait c'est ma notion Espaces et Echanges ma première partie a déjà été corrigée. Merci d'avance

Puisqu'il en est ainsi, il était inutile de la remettre en ligne comme si c'était un nouveau sujet ! Il suffisait simplement d'ajouter la suite dans le fil du sujet déjà ouvert. Un peu de bon sens SVP !

Conclusion : messages fusionnés et nouveau sujet supprimé.

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        What are the reasons of immigration?

 

First I’m going to explain why people immigrate and in the second time we will see has  what the  immigrants expect and what they bring to the host countries.

Si tu te contentes d'un simple copier-coller pour reproduire des fautes déjà corrigées, ça ne va pas le faire !

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II-     The principal goal of the migration it’s < Pas de double sujet en anglais !  is the American dream, for this which is the reason why there are much  many more immigrants in the USA than in other countries. The American dream is the notion that the American social, economic, and political system makes success possible for every individual. Someone who manages to achieve their version of the American dream is said to be “living the dream”. Many people criticize the idea of the American dream because they say that it is impossible for everyone to be able to fulfill their dreams, there are still inequalities in class, race, religion and ethnicity preventing people from “living the dream”. People dream of owning land and establishing a prosperous business and hopes  <people est un pluriel !  that this would make them happier. But America is not like they think.

 

The  Americans do not want to make enter welcome nor integrate the  immigrants in their countriesy. < Pour autant que je sache, les américains n'ont qu'un pays ! Réfléchis-tu vraiment à ce que tu écris ? We can make a link between the notion and the cartoon “Is the grass really greener?” studied in class. The title invites those tempted by immigration to think twice before making their move. The man on the left is Uncle Sam, in other words the US government. The two men on the right are Mexicans who were planning to enter the US in search of a job and a better life. The billboards show graphs illustrating the dire state of the US economy. They replace the fence and are intended to play the same role: to deter would-be immigrants. And it seems to work fine if we are to believe the Mexicans’ decision to turn back and forget the “American dream”. Uncle Sam explains why the charts have been put up. He seems confident that they will play a more efficient role in deterring the immigrants than a fence would. The Mexicans have realized that the grass may not be that greener on the other side, which both the landscape and the billboards show.

 

III-          Conclusion

 

To conclude, most people immigrant emigrate in order to escape war, poverty, famine. <Toute phrase doit comporter un verbe ! They have a vision view of the countries where they want to go that is not good. Arrived in the receiving  host country they understand that ultimately it is not the life they hoped and that it is far from resembling at the American dream.

 

[Lebailly]

Merci beaucoup