Correction d'une lettre commerciale

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Sherry-Lehmann Wine and Spirits,

505 Park avenue,

New York, NY 10022

USA

 

15 december 2015

 

M.Hiroshi Katanishi

Purchasing Manager

Suntory Liquor Ltd,

2 Daiba, Minato-Ku

Tokyo, 135-8621

Japon

 

Delivery report of the order placed at the wine fair in San Francisco in October

 

Dear Mr Hiroshi Katanishi

 

After a first order for 30 boxes of Whisky Hibiki to test the product in New York, I 'd like to order more for 2016.

I would like 100 boxes to feed my store in New York but also several stores in Boston and Florida.

I would like to know the new prices 2016, deliveries of the delays for orders and sales conditions for regular orders.

Do you make custom labels because some of my big customer wonder ?

 

Yours sincerely

 

Jonathan Lehmannn

Purchasing Manager

 

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Bonjour,

Sherry-Lehmann Wine and Spirits,

505 Park avenue,

New York, NY 10022

USA

 

15 december 2015

 

M.Hiroshi Katanishi

Purchasing Manager

Suntory Liquor Ltd,

2 Daiba, Minato-Ku

Tokyo, 135-8621

Japon > Japan

 

Delivery report of the order placed at the wine fair in San Francisco in October

 

Dear Mr Hiroshi Katanishi

 

Following/After a first previous order for 30 boxes of Whisky Hibiki to test the product in New York, I would like to order more for 2016. < les contractions verbales sont à éviter dans ce type d'écrit

I would like to have 100 boxes delivered to feed supply/stock my store in New York but also several stores in Boston and Florida.

I would like to Would you please let me know the 2016 new prices 2016, deliveries of the delays delivery time for orders and sales conditions for regular orders?

Do you make customs labels because some of my great/main/big customers wonder? < Qu'entends-tu exactement  par "customs labels" ? Quoi qu'il en soit, cette phrase est plutôt mal formulée. Suggestion : >> Some of my main customers wonder whether you make customs labels.

 

Yours sincerely

 

Jonathan Lehmannn

Purchasing Manager