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[Lebailly]

Bonjour j'aurais besoin d'aide pour une correction en anglais  s'il vous plait merci d'avance

 

I’m going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. I'm going to use a few documents that deal with myths and heroes. A hero is a person who is admired for their courage, outstanding achievement or noble qualities. It can be the main character of a book or a film or person with superhuman qualities. It can also be a modern day hero a person who has a performed a heroic action our own personal hero our role model, who we look up to. We may ask the question: How have myths and heroes changed our lives?

 

Heroes influence us throughout our lives, from childhood to adulthood.

 

I-                  Childhood

 

Children need to identify. The father, the mother but sometimes they take to model their heroes like Superman, Batman or Wonder Woman. It is a positive and powerful identification figure allowing them to enhance, to feel stronger and invincible. The child will be able to live the scenarios and fantasies that he is not living in reality. He will sometimes allow it to surpass in some events of his childhood life and represents a landmark for identifying structuring self-confidence. Children, confronted with frustrations and fears in a world where these are adults who decide, be able to escape into their imaginary worlds where they are, in their tours in power positions, with the control of what they live. It is preferable for children to identify with a hero who wears a suit, ca their allows dressing and changing identities. With their costume, they change skin. In fiction, these characters use precisely their costume to become super heroes. Without them, they appear as any. It is as if their costumes their gave their personalities strong and courageous. They can then dream to be those they admire and become themselves again when they decide. This is a way to escape from reality.

 

A moral moved and it is easier for them to make the distinction between good and evil. Super heroes generally represent the good and fight evil, they have powers and often full of goodness. It is good ways to strengthen the capacity of distinction of the children who, through their hero will be able invest positive images.

 

Boys looking for a picture of identifying strong and combative, reinforcing the sense of power such as Batman or Superman. And a father represents virility, strength, and authority in General. Girls will turn toward the female and brilliant images as Wonder Woman. Indeed, girls will seek to develop their femininities and be more beautiful. It is also that transmit tales and cartoons where there is often a princess dream girls. The trick is to allow the child to identify with positive images suitable for his age.

 

II-                 Adulthood

 

When you become adult our superheroes change, be more escape from reality but well face. Somehow it becomes us even to superheroes; we must solve them facing multiple problems and a lapse of time. This is the complexity of becoming adult. It no longer has the same focus that as a child, we are interested in real people who move the world as Steve Jobs, Martin Luther King. Thanks to them the world takes a major step forward both in policy and in technology.

 

 

For example Steve Jobs is the co-founder of Apple; he embodies the American dream since only he managed to build an empire of determination and hard work. He was not so much an inventor as a visionary who used other people to invention to revolutionize a computer world. Beside he galvanized his staff finally his company Apple is a mixture of art and technology. It may not be a hero for all, but it remains nevertheless a legend.

 

Martin Luther King was a non-violent activist for the civil rights of blacks; he played a major role in the emancipation of African Americans and the awareness of the injustice of segregation in the United States.  He fought for his beliefs, he did hear his ideas, which was not easy at the time and even less if it was black. These people are heroes and to date they have become myths because their story will be told for a long time.

 

Conclusion:

 

Whether child or adult the heroes have an important place in our lives. There is not the same point of view since adults are mature enough to make the difference between the imaginary and the real.

 

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

I’m going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. I'm going to use a few documents that deal with myths and heroes. A hero is a person who is admired for their courage, outstanding achievement or noble qualities. It can be the main character of a book or a film or  a person with superhuman qualities. It can also be a modern day hero a person who has a performed a heroic action, our own personal hero, our role model whom we look up to.< Relatif complément, pas sujet. We may ask the question: How have myths and heroes changed our lives?

 

Heroes influence us throughout our lives, from childhood to adulthood.

 

I-                  Childhood

 

Children need to identify with a model, the father, the mother but sometimes they take to model upon their heroes like Superman, Batman or Wonder Woman. It is a positive and powerful identification figure allowing them to enhance show off to advantage, (to) feel stronger and invincible. The child will be able to live the scenarios and fantasies that he is not living in reality. He will sometimes allow it to surpass in some events of his childhood life and represents a landmark for identifying structuring self-confidence.< Désolé, cette phrase est trop confuse, je ne comprends pas ce que tu as voulu dire. Children, confronted with frustrations and fears in a world where these are adults who decide, be able to escape into their imaginary worlds where they are, in their tours in power positions, with the control of what they live. < Idem, tu te perds dans des méandres. Simplifie ton expression. It is preferable for children to identify with a hero who wears a suit, ca their allows dressing and changing identities. <??? With their costume, they change skin are somebody else. In fiction, these characters use precisely their costume to become super heroes. Without them, they appear as anybody. It is as if their costumes their gave them their strong and courageous personalities strong and courageous. < Les adjectifs AVANT le nom ! They can then pretend/dream to be those they admire and become themselves again when they decide. This is a way to escape from reality.

 

A moral moved < ??? and it is easier for them to make the distinction between good and evil. Super heroes generally represent the good and fight evil, they have powers and are often full of goodness. It is a good way/means to strengthen the capacity of distinction of the children who will be able to invest positive images through their hero.

 

Boys looking for a picture of identifying strong and combative, reinforcing the sense of power such as Batman or Superman. < Est-ce une phrase ? Non. And a father represents virility, strength, and authority in general. Girls will turn toward the female and brilliant images as Wonder Woman. Indeed, girls will seek to develop their femininities and be more beautiful. It is also that transmit tales and cartoons where there is often a princess dream girls.< ??? The trick is to allow the child to identify with positive images suitable for his age.

 

II-                 Adulthood

 

When you become adult our superheroes change, be more escape from reality but well face.< ??? Somehow it becomes us even to superheroes; we must solve them facing multiple problems and a lapse of time.< ??? This is the complexity of becoming adult. It no longer has the same focus that as a child, we are interested in real people who move the world as Steve Jobs, Martin Luther King. Thanks to them the world takes a major step forward both in policy and in technology.

 

 For example Steve Jobs is the co-founder of Apple; he embodies the American dream since only all alone he managed to build an empire of through/by/thanks to determination and hard work. He was not so much an inventor as a visionary who used other people to invention to revolutionize a computer the world of information technology (IT). Besides he galvanized his staff finally his company Apple is a mixture of art and technology. It He may not be a hero for all, but it nevertheless he remains  a legend.

 

Martin Luther King was a non-violent activist for the civil rights of blacks; he played a major role in the emancipation of African Americans and the awareness of the injustice of segregation in the United States.  He fought for his beliefs, he did hear made his ideas heard, which was not easy at the time and even less so if it was you were black. These people are heroes and to date they have become myths because their story will be told for a long time.

 

Conclusion:

 

Whether we are a child or an adult the heroes have an important place in our lives. There is not the same point of view since adults are mature enough to make the difference between the imaginary and the real.

J'ai fait du mieux que j'ai pu avec ce que tu as fait, sans grand succès je le crains.

Dans son "Art poétique", Nicolas Boileau (1636-1711) a écrit :

" Ce qui se conçoit bien s'énonce clairement

Et les mots pour le dire vous viennent aisément ". Tu devrais essayer de t'en inspirer partout où j'ai mis du rouge et des points d'interrogation triples.

[Lebailly]

Merci pour votre aide 

NB : Messages fusionnés puisqu'il s'agit du même sujet.

JRB

Bonjour Merci de m'avoir aider j'ai reformuler des phrases et j'aurais besoin d'une nouvelle correction merci

I’m going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. I'm going to use a few documents that deal with myths and heroes. A hero is a person who is admired for their courage, outstanding achievement or noble qualities. It can be the main character of a book or a film or a person with superhuman qualities. It can also be a modern day hero a person who has performed a heroic action our own personal hero our role model, whom we look up to. We may ask the question: How have myths and heroes changed our lives?

 

Heroes influence us throughout our lives, from childhood to adulthood.

 

I-                  Childhood

 

Children need to identify with a model, the father, the mother but sometimes they model upon their heroes like Superman, Batman or Wonder Woman. It is a positive and powerful identification figure allowing them to show off advantage, feel stronger and invincible.  The child will be able to live the scenarios and fantasies that he is not living in reality. It sometimes will enable him to exceed itself in certain tests of its life of child, and represents a reference mark of identification structuring the self-confidence. Children, confronted with their frustrations and their fears in a world where they are the adults who decide, will be able to thus escape in their imaginary worlds where they are, in their turns in positions of powers, with the control of what they live. It is preferable for the children to be identified with a hero who carries a costume, that their makes it possible to disguise and change identity. With their costume, they are somebody else. In fiction, these characters use precisely their costume to become super heroes. Without them, they appear as any. It is as if their costumes gave them their strong and courageous personalities. They can then pretend to be those they admire and become themselves again when they decide. This is a way to escape from reality.

 

A moral settles and it is easier for them to make the distinction between good and evil. Super heroes generally represent the good and fight evil, they have powers and are often full of goodness. It is a good means to strengthen the capacity of distinction of children who, through their hero will be able to invest positive images.

 

The boys search an image of strong and combative identification, reinforcing the feeling of power like Batman or Superman. A father represents virility, strength, and authority in General. Girls will turn toward the female and brilliant images as Wonder Woman. Indeed, girls will seek to develop their femininities and be more beautiful. It is also what the tales and cartoons transmit where there is often a princess to make dream the girls. The trick is to allow the child to identify with positive images suitable for his age.

 

II-                 Adulthood

 

When you becomes adult our supermen change, you should not escape any more from reality but cope with it well. To some extent one becomes us even of the supermen, we must cope with multiple problems and in a lapse of time to solve them. This is the complexity of becoming adult. It no longer has the same focus that as a child, we are interested in real people who move the world as Steve Jobs, Martin Luther King. Thanks to them the world takes a major step forward both in policy and in technology.

 

 

For example Steve Jobs is the co-founder of Apple; he embodies the American dream since all alone he managed to build an empire through to determination and hard work. He was not so much an inventor as a visionary who used other people to revolutionize the world of information technology. Besides he galvanized his staff finally his company Apple is a mixture of art and technology. He may not be a hero for all, nevertheless he remains nevertheless a legend.

 

Martin Luther King was a non-violent activist for the civil rights of blacks; he played a major role in the emancipation of African Americans and the awareness of the injustice of segregation in the United States.  He fought for his beliefs, he made his ideas heard, which was not easy at the time and even less so if you were black. These people are heroes and to date they have become myths because their story will be told for a long time.

 

Conclusion:

 

Whether we are a child or an adult heroes have an important place in our lives. There is not the same point of view since adults are mature enough to make the difference between the imaginary and the real.

 

 

Mon anglais n'est pas bon alors je l'es écrit en français puis je l'es traduit si vous ne comprenez pas voila mon devoir en français 

 

I-                  Childhood

 

Les enfants ont besoin de s’identifier. Au père, à la mère mais parfois, ils prennent pour modèle leurs héros comme Superman, Batman ou Wonder Woman. C’est une figure d’identification positive et puissante qui leur permet de se valoriser, de se sentir plus fort et invincible. L’enfant va pouvoir vivre des scénarios et fantasmes qu’il ne vit pas dans la réalité. Il va parfois lui permettre de se surpasser dans certaines épreuves de sa vie d’enfant, et représente un repère d’identification structurant la confiance en soi. Les enfants, confrontés à leurs frustrations et leurs peurs dans un monde où ce sont les adultes qui décident, pourront ainsi s’échapper dans leurs mondes imaginaires où ils sont, à leurs tours dans des positions de puissances, avec la maîtrise de ce qu’ils vivent. Il est préférable pour les enfants de s’identifier à un héro qui porte un costume, ça leurs permet de se déguiser et de changer d’identité. Avec leur costume, ils changent de peau. Dans la fiction, ces personnages recourent justement à leur costume pour devenir des supers héros. Sans eux, ils apparaissent comme des personnes quelconques. C’est comme si leurs costumes leurs donnaient leurs personnalités fortes et courageuses. Ils peuvent alors rêver d’être ceux qu’ils admirent et redevenir eux-mêmes lorsqu’ils le décident. C’est une manière de s’échapper de la réalité.

 

Une moral s’installe et il est plus facile pour eux de faire la distinction entre le bien et le mal. Les super héros en général,  représentent le bien et luttent contre le mal, ils sont munis de pouvoirs et souvent pleins de bonté. C’est un bon moyen de renforcer les capacités de distinction des enfants qui, par le biais de leur héros, vont pouvoir investir des images positives.

 

Les garçons recherchent une image d’identification forte et combative, renforçant le sentiment de puissance comme Batman ou Superman. De même qu’un père représente la virilité, la force et l’autorité en règle générale. Les filles se tourneront plutôt vers des images féminines et brillantes comme Wonder Woman. En effet, les filles chercheront à développer leurs féminités et être plus belle. C’est aussi ce que transmettent les contes et dessins animés où il y a souvent une princesse pour faire rêver les filles. Le tout est de permettre à l’enfant de s’identifier à des images positives et adaptées à son âge.

 

 

 

 

II-                 Adulthood

 

Lorsque l’on devient adulte nos super-héros changent, on ne doit plus s’échapper de la réalité mais bien y faire face. En quelque sorte on devient nous même des super-héros, nous devons faire face à de multiples problèmes et en un lapse de temps les résoudre. Voila toute la complexité de devenir adulte. On n’a plus le même centre d’intérêt qu’étant enfant, on s’intéresse à des personnes réelles qui font bouger le monde comme Steve Jobs, Martin Luther King. Grâce à eux le monde prend une avancée considérable que ce soit dans la politique ou dans la technologie.

 

 Par exemple Steve Jobs est le cofondateur d’Apple, il  incarne le rêve américain depuis qu'il a réussi à construire un empire de détermination et de travail acharné. Il n’était pas tellement un inventeur mais plus un visionnaire qui a utilisé d'autres inventions afin de révolutionner le monde de l'ordinateur. La société Apple est un mélange d'art et de la technologie. Il peut ne pas être un héros pour tous, mais il restera malgré tout une légende.

 

 Martin Luther King était un militant non-violent pour les droits civiques des noirs, il a joué un rôle majeur pour l’émancipation des Afro-américains et la prise de conscience de l’injustice de la ségrégation aux Etats-Unis. Il a lutté pour ses convictions, il a fait entendre ses idées, ce qui n’était pas facile à l’époque et encore moins si on était noir. Ces personnes sont des héros et à ce jour ils sont devenus des mythes parce que leur histoire sera racontée pendant très longtemps.

 

Conclusion :

 

Que l’on soit enfant ou adulte les héros ont une grande place dans nos vies. On n’a pas le même point de vu puisque les adultes sont assez matures pour faire la différence entre l’imaginaire et le réel.

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I’m going to talk about the notion of myths and heroes. I'm going to use a few documents that deal with myths and heroes. A hero is a person who is admired for their courage, outstanding achievement or noble qualities. It can be the main character of a book or a film or a person with superhuman qualities. It can also be a modern day hero, a person who has performed a heroic action, our own personal hero, our role model, whom we look up to. We may ask the question: How have myths and heroes changed our lives?

Heroes influence us throughout our lives, from childhood to adulthood.

 

I-                  Childhood

Children need to identify with a model, the father, the mother but sometimes they model upon their heroes like Superman, Batman or Wonder Woman. It is a positive and powerful identification figure allowing them to show off advantage, feel stronger and invincible.  The child will be able to live the scenarios and fantasies that he is not living in reality. It sometimes will enable him/her to exceed ithim/herself in certain tests of its his/her life of child, and represents a reference mark of identification structuring the self-confidence. Children, confronted with their frustrations and their fears in a world where they are the adults who decide, will be able to thus escape in their imaginary worlds where they are, in their turns in positions of powers, with the control of what they live. It is preferable for the children to be identified with a hero who carries wears a costume that their makes it possible which enables them to disguise and change identity. With their costume, they are somebody else. In fiction, these characters use precisely their costume to become super heroes. Without them, they appear as anybody. It is as if their costumes gave them their strong and courageous personalities. They can then pretend to be those they admire and become themselves again when they decide. This is a way to escape from reality.

A moral settles and it is easier for them to make the distinction between good and evil. Super heroes generally represent the good and fight evil, they have powers and are often full of goodness. It is a good means to strengthen the capacity of distinction of children who, through their hero, will be able to invest positive images.

 

The Boys search look for an image of strong and combative identification, reinforcing the feeling of power like Batman or Superman. A father represents virility, strength and authority in general. Girls will turn toward the female and brilliant images as Wonder Woman. Indeed, girls will seek to develop their femininities and be more beautiful. It is also what the tales and cartoons transmit where there is often a princess to make dream the girls dream. The trick is to allow the child to identify with positive images suitable for his/her age. < Note que le nom "child" peut être masculin et/ou féminin.

 

II-                 Adulthood

When you we becomes adult our supermen change, you we should must no longer escape from reality but definitely cope with it well. To some extent one we even becomes us even of the supermen, we must cope with multiple problems and in a lapse of time to solve them in a given period of time. This is the complexity of becoming adult. It We no longer have the same focus that as we had when a child, we are interested in real people who move the world as Steve Jobs, Martin Luther King. Thanks to them the world takes a major step forward both in policy politics and in technology.

For example Steve Jobs is the co-founder of Apple; he embodies the American dream since all alone he managed to build an empire through to determination and hard work. He was not so much an inventor as a visionary who used other people to revolutionize the world of information technology. Besides he galvanized his staff, finally his company Apple is a mixture of art and technology. He may not be a hero for all, nevertheless he remains nevertheless a legend.

 

Martin Luther King was a non-violent activist for the civil rights of blacks; he played a major role in the emancipation of African Americans and the awareness of the injustice of segregation in the United States.  He fought for his beliefs, he made his ideas heard, which was not easy at the time and even less so if you were black. These people are heroes and to date they have become myths because their story will be told for a long time.

 

Conclusion:

Whether we are a child or an adult, heroes have an important place in our lives. There is As adults we do not have the same point of view since adults we are mature enough to make the difference between the imaginary imagination and reality/the real.

 

Mon anglais n'est pas bon< ton français non plus alors je l'es< la preuve ai écrit en français puis je l'es ai traduit si vous ne comprenez pas voilaà mon devoir en français < Évite de me prendre pour un arriéré mental s'il te plaît !

Remarques :

1° Le plagiat est interdit et, s'il est avéré, t'expose à des poursuites judiciaires.

2°Le passage préalable par le français est une sottise complète qui ne sert qu'à te faire reproduire tes multiples fautes de français, orthographe et grammaire.

3°Le recours à un traducteur en ligne est une seconde sottise, non moins complète que la précédente et si tu persistes à l'utiliser à l'avenir tu t'exposera à une fin de non-recevoir de ma part, tiens-le toi pour dit.

[Lebailly]

Je suis désolée que vous l'ailliez pris comme ça je fais aussi des fautes en français mais mon anglais est vraiment nul donc je l'ai mis en français  pour que vous compreniez mieux. Il y a aucun plagiat de ma part j'ai mis une semaine à faire mon devoir. Merci de votre aide 

[Jean B]

C'est noté.