Oral Bac : Spaces And Exchanges

[AyaAb]

Bonjour, 

 

Je passe mes oraux du bac la semaine prochaine, est ce qu'il serait possible de voir s'il y a des fautes s'il vous plaît, je pense que oui mais étant d'un niveau assez bas, je ne l'ai trouve pas toutes seules. 

 

Merci à ceux qui prendront le temps de me répondre. 

 

 

 

                             I'am going to about the notion spaces and exchange. First of all I would like to give a quick definition of that notion and espacially of the word exchange. It is a continuous movement and circulation. The different spaces of word are nowarday more and more connected to each other.

The exchanges can appear on many forms: trade, information, peaple, culture.

We are going to focus on United States and we want to wondering in what United states are an Space of exchange ?

First we went to see that United states is a  multicultural nation  of immigrant, and secondy we went see what things favorise this exchange. 

 

 

                            United states were populated by waves of immigration, from Europe, then from the world.  Between 1970 and 1920, 20 millions european as Italian, Grecs,  immigrated in United States.

In  class we have seen that 99% of the population are issue of the immigration. This immigrations have differents motive, the first is an economy reason, people come to find a work, to profit to attractive wage Or the brain dain , the second is policical reason, to flee dictature, lots of persons avoid the religious persecutions of their contry and we can quote an other reason, which is personal, for example to live the amercains dream

United States welcoming between 500 000 and 800 000 entered every years.  In United states we can find 64% of European, 17% of Hispanique people from mexico, or Cuba 13 % of africain amercain and 4 % odf asian. The Melting pot or salad bowl, are expressions to illustate the population.

Those immigration are a form of exchange because lot of cumunity exchanges their culture. For example wen we went to United states with the school, we went to visited Cheanatan, it is a city when we find lot of Chinise people, we can find restaurant and Chinese store.

It is very intersting because we find a differents people and learn about their community without moving far. We had visited too Harlem and its same of chinintane but it is an other community.

 

 In the political sphere, we can find an other type of exchange, like the ALENA, an regional integration, it is an agreement between 3 contry, to favour the free exchanges, the circulation of capitals, but not persons. This diffrents contry exchanges goods and services.

The United States export in the world their goods, their capital, their services, but also their culture, their lifestyles, their vision of the world. 

 

 The spread of the culture and the lifestyles of a country thanks to the media. It is an exchange because some people, take it and adopt it, but their are also a refusal of this lifestyle. The cinema, and social network, conveys the americain's lifestyle. The americanization is a term which was widely used on the XXeme century to describe the influence then exercised by the United States on the life of the citizens of the other countries of the world, this influence propagating all or part of the characteristics of the American culture with the consumer society.

 To be even more near  of this lifestyle and so discover it, some people particpate to an exchange program. This program as April or Erasmus in Europe permit to discover the contry and learn other things. This year with my class, we had participated to a similar program, it is the PeaceProgram between United States and France. It was so intersting to exhange our culture and our vision of the world.

 

To conclude we can say that United states it is an real space of exchange, their are lot of instutution which permite to exchange with the world. But Nowaday we can see that this exchange in United States are weakened because the presence of some cummunity disturbs because the culture of one is not accord with the culture of other. We can see that in spacial segragation. In the suburb like Clifton Parck, we find lot of white people and not blaxk people, but in harlem white people are very infrequent. So the exchange is difcult if their are not social mixity. 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

 

Beaucoup de fautes élémentaires de grammaire, syntaxe, vocabulaire, orthographe et même de frappe, à croire, pour ces dernières, que tu ne te relis jamais.

J'ai fait de mon mieux pour rendre ton texte intelligible mais, vu l'ampleur de la tâche, je ne garantis pas avoir tout vu ni tout corrigé.

Bonne chance pour ton oral.

 

PS Pour qu'il soit plus explicite, j'ai modifié le titre de ton sujet.

 

Bonjour, 

 

Je passe mes oraux du bac la semaine prochaine. Est-ce qu'il serait possible de voir s'il y a des fautes s'il vous plaît ? Je pense que oui mais étant d'un niveau assez bas, je ne l'ai les trouve pas toutes seules. 

 

Merci à ceux qui prendront le temps de me répondre. 

 

 

 

                             I'am going to talk about the notion spaces and exchange. First of all I would like to give a quick definition of that notion and espacially of the word exchange. It is a continuous movement and circulation. The different Various spaces of the world are nowarday more and more connected to each other nowadays.

The Exchanges can appear on many forms: trade, information, people, culture. <<<Aucun article quand on parle des choses en général.

We are going to focus on the United States and we want to wondering in what wonder how the United states are is an a space of exchange. ? <<<Bien que constitués de 50 états, les États-Unis sont considérés comme un seul et même pays, une seule et même nation = verbe au singulier. *** wonder, se demander, induit une interrogation indirecte = point, pas point d'interrogation.

First we went are going to see that the United states is a multicultural nation of immigrants and secondy we went see what things favorise contribute to the development of this exchange. 

 

 

                           The United states were was populated by waves of immigration from Europe, then from all over the world.  Between 1970 and 1920,  From 1920 to 1970 20 millions Europeans as Italians, Grecs Greeks immigrated into the United States.

In  class we have seen that 99% of the population are issue of the stem from immigration. This immigrations have differents motive results from various causes: the first is an economy economical reason one because people come to find a work, to profit to take advantage of attractive wages or are part of the brain drain. The second cause is political reason,: to flee dictature or religious persecution, lots of persons people avoid the religious persecutions of leave their home countries and we can quote another reason which is personal, for example to live the American dream.

The United States welcomes between from 500 000 and to 800 000 entered entries every years. <<<every est suivi d'un singulier In the United states we can find 64% of Europeans, 17% of Hispaniquec people from Mexico or Cuba, 13 % of africain amercain Afro-Americans/African-Americans and 4 % of Asians.<<<Tous les noms et adjectifs de nationalités prennent une majuscule The Melting pot or salad bowl, are expressions to illustate the population.

Those immigrations are a form of exchange because lots of communities exchanges their cultures. For example when we went to the United states with the school teachers, we went to visited Cheanatan Chinatown, it is a city when a district where we can find lots of Chinese people, we can find restaurants and Chinese stores.<<< L'adjectif mis en tête s'applique aux 3 noms qui le suivent, inutile de le répéter.

It is very interesting because we find a differents people and learn about their community without moving far.<<<Les adjectifs sont invariables We had visited Harlem too and its the same of as Chinatown but/except that it is another a Black community.

 

 In the political sphere we can find another type of exchange, like the ALENA, an regional integration, it which is an agreement between 3 countries to favour the free exchanges, the circulation of capitals, but not persons. This These diffrents various countries exchanges goods and services. <<< this + nom singulier <---> these + nom pluriel *** -s final au présent simple d'un verbe seulement si son sujet est singulier. Par conséquent, pas de -s final quand le sujet est pluriel.

The United States exports in the world their its goods, their capital, their services, but also their its culture, their lifestyles, their vision of the world. 

 

 The spread of the culture and the lifestyles of a country thanks to the media is an exchange because some people take it and adopt it them but there are some others who also a refusal of refuse this lifestyle. The cinema and social networks conveys the americain's lifestyle of Americans. The Americanization is a term which was widely used on in the XXemeth century to describe the influence then exercised by the United States on the life of the citizens of the other countries of in the world. This influence propagating spread all or part of the characteristics of the American culture with the consumer society.

 To be even more nearer of to this lifestyle and so discover it, some people participate to in an exchange program. This program as April or Erasmus in Europe permit enables students to discover the country and learn other things. This year with my class we had participated to in a similar program, it is the Peace Program between the United States and France. It was so interesting to exchange our culture and our vision of the world.

 

To conclude we can say that the United states it is an real space of exchange, their there are lots of institutions which permite enable people to exchange with the world. But nowadays we can see that this these exchanges in the United States are weakened because of the presence of some communities which can be perceived as a cause of disturbance because the culture of one is not accord in harmony with the culture of the other. We can see that in spacial space segregation. In the a suburb like Clifton Park, we find lots of white people and not black people, but in Harlem white people are very infrequent. So the exchanging is difficult if their are not there is no social mixity.