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[mezi59]

Bonjour et bonne année, je suis en terminale L au CNED et je suis persuadée que j'ai fais des fautes dans mon expression donc si quelqu'un pouvait m'aider pour une correction et m'expliquer mes erreurs SVP

Merci d'avance meziane

1-Explain why there are such things as war memorials and war commemorations. Can they help heal people who have suffered? Write up to 120 words.

I would say rather not because war of the Vietnam has was dreadful and this event go to remain engrave in their memory!!

It is possible to recover physically in some wounds. But psychologically it is more difficult because they remember our fellows who died or our missing friends and as in all wars neglect is difficult. It is possible to keep the hate of the enemy for life. Alone a psychotherapist sensible can try to help them by bringing them a listening and a big understanding, without any judgment, what can lighten suffering and is possible allow possibly the way of healing. First of all, the person lived, witness was or was confronted with an event or in events during whom his physical integrity or that of other people was possible be indeed. The person reacts to this event by a feeling of intense fright, of horror or impotence. It exists actually of many ways to begin recovering .Admit and accept our various reactions, even if they are painful, constitute probably the best attitude to be adopted if they want to turn over a new leaf quickly after a traumatic event he is important not to isolate itself, the presence of a close who will be able listen to you and he could be advantageous to reach you to groups of mutual assistance to express his emotions and accomplish that you are not alone.

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[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjour et bonne année,

Je suis en terminale L au CNED et je suis persuadée* que j'ai faist** des fautes dans mon expression. Donc si quelqu'un pouvait m'aider pour une correction et m'expliquer mes erreurs SVP.

Merci d'avance meziane

* Si tu es bien de sexe masculin comme indiqué dans ton profil, alors le -e final est superflu.

** Le participe passé devient "faite" au féminin. C'est un moyen mnémotechnique pour mémoriser la bonne orthographe et ne plus refaire la faute.

1-Explain why there are such things as war memorials and war commemorations. Can they help heal people who have suffered? Write up to 120 words.

I would rather say no because the war of the Vietnam has was dreadful and this event go to remain is engraved forever on their memories! <<Je te déconseille formellement d'utiliser un traducteur en ligne car, si à l'avenir tu postes ici une nouvelle demande, tu t'exposes au risque de ne recevoir aucune réponse. Nous aidons volontiers les gens mais refusons catégoriquement d'aider les robots, tiens-le toi pour dit.

It is possible to recover physically in from some wounds. But psychologically it is more difficult because they war memorials remember remind us our fellows who died or our missing friends and as in all wars neglect is difficult. - L'emploi d'un pronom sujet n'est valable que si le nom qu'il remplace a été employé juste avant, ce qui est loin d'être le cas ici.

- to remember sth = se rappeler qqch/se souvenir de qqch <<--->> to remind sb sth = rappeler qqch à qqn

It is possible to keep the hate of on hating the enemy for life / forever. << to keep on + v-ing = continuer à/de + infinitif Alone Only a sensible psychotherapist sensible can try to help them by bringing granting them a listening / a sympathetic ear and a big understanding without passing any judgment on them, what which can lighten / soothe sufferings and is possible allow possibly the way of may lead to healing.

First of all, the person lived, witness was or was confronted with an event or in events during whom his physical integrity or that of other people was possible be indeed. The person reacts to this event by a feeling of intense fright, of horror or impotence. It exists actually of many ways to begin recovering .Admit and accept our various reactions, even if they are painful, constitute probably the best attitude to be adopted if they want to turn over a new leaf quickly after a traumatic event he is important not to isolate itself, the presence of a close who will be able listen to you and he could be advantageous to reach you to groups of mutual assistance to express his emotions and accomplish that you are not alone. <<Ma crainte première se trouve confirmée par tout ce charabia, hélas. Toutefois en cette période de fêtes si tu fais l'effort d'oublier ce que tu as d'abord écrit en français pour écrire directement en anglais en construisant des phrases cohérentes, alors peut-être ferai-je l'effort moi aussi de comprendre ce que tu as voulu dire afin de t'apporter des corrections.

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[mezi59]

merci de ta patience voici le texte en français

Je dirais plutôt non car le guerre du vietnam a était atroce et cette événement va rester graver dans leur mémoire !!

on peut guérir physiquement à certaines blessures. Mais psychologiquement c'est plus difficile car on se souvient de nos proches qui sont morts ou de nos amis disparus et comme dans toutes les guerres l'oubli est difficile.On peut conserver la haine de l'ennemi pour la vie.

Seul un psychothérapeute avisé peut tenter de les aider en leur apportant une écoute et une grande compréhension, sans aucun jugement, ce qui peut alléger la souffrance et peut permettre éventuellement la voie de la guérison.Tout d’abord, la personne a vécu, a été témoin ou a été confronté à un événement ou à des événements durant lesquels son intégrité physique ou celle d’autrui a pu être réellement. La personne réagit à cet événement par un sentiment de peur intense, d’horreur ou d’impuissance.

Il existe effectivement de nombreuses façons pour commencer à guérir

Reconnaître et accepter nos diverses réactions, même si elles sont douloureuses, constitue probablement la meilleure attitude à adopter si l’on veut tourner la page rapidement après un événement traumatique -

Il est important de ne pas s’isoler, la présence d’un proche qui saura vous écouter et il pourrait être bénéfique de vous joindre à des groupes d’entraide pour exprimer ses émotions et réaliser que vous n’êtes pas seul.

j'ai essayer de le refaire pouvez vous le corriger svp

I would rather say no because the war of Vietnam was dreadful and this event is engraved forever on their memories!

it is possible to recover physically in some wounds. But psychologically it is more difficult because they remember our fellows who died or our missing friends and as in all wars neglect is difficult. It is possible to keep the hate of the enemy for life.

Alone a sensible psychotherapist can try to help them by bringing them a listening and a big understanding, without any judgement, what can lighten suffering and can allow possibly the way of healing. First of all, the person lived, witness was or confronted with an event or with events during which his physical integrity or that of other people could be indeed. The person reacts to this event by a feeling of intense fright, of horror or of impotence.

It really exists of many ways to begin recovering

Admit and accept our various reactions, even if they are painful, constitute probably the best attitude to be adopted if they want to turn over a new leaf fast after a traumatic event -

It is important not to isolate himself, the presence of a close who will be able listen to you and it could be advantageous to reach you to groups of mutual assistance to express his emotions and to realise that you are not alone.

[Jean B]

Faire un simple copié-collé de ta mouture précédente sans même tenir compte de mes remarques, suggestions et corrections ne m'encourage pas à poursuivre, bien au contraire.

[mezi59]

Oui je sais mais j'ai fait une erreur, j'ai copié-collé sans corriger et j'ai essayer de modifier impossible:(

[Jean B]

Dans ce cas, relis la portion corrigée et remanies la suite en éliminant le plus possible de fautes. De toute façon, tu dépasses de beaucoup la limite imposée des 120 mots, tu en a pondu quasiment le double. Essaye de condenser ton expression car j'ai l'impression que tu as un peu perdu de vue l'énoncé du sujet.

[mezi59]

Merci beaucoup de ton aide

[Jean B]

Quand tu y auras bien réfléchi, poste le nouveau texte et je te promets d'y jeter un oeil bienveillant.

[mezi59]

J'ai refait le texte en essayant de réduire mais je suis arrivé a faire 143 mot:(

cordialement

Meziane

I would rather say no because the war of Vietnam was dreadful and this event is engraved forever on their memories!

It is possible to recover physically from some wounds. But psychologically it is more difficult because war memorials remind us our fellows who died or our missing friends and as in all wars neglect is difficult.

Only a sensible psychotherapist can try to help them by granting them listening ear and big understanding without passing any judgment on them, which can lighten, soothe sufferings and may lead to healing.

It exists actually of many ways to begin recovering .he is important not to isolate itself, the presence of a close who will be able listen to you and he could be advantageous to reach you to groups of mutual assistance to express his emotions and accomplish that you are not alone.

[Jean B]

I would rather say no because war is a dreadful event which is engraved forever on combatants' memories!

It is possible to recover physically from some wounds. But psychologically it is more difficult because war memorials remind us our fellows who died or our missing friends and as in all wars neglect is difficult.

Only a sensible psychotherapist can try to help them by granting them listening and understanding without passing any judgment on them, which can lighten their sufferings and may lead to healing.

Actually there are many ways to begin recovering. It is important not to isolate but find a close relation who will be able to listen to you. It could also be beneficial to join groups of mutual aid to express your emotions and realize that you are not alone.

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[mezi59]

merci beaucoup de votre aide et de votre patience

[mezi59]

j'ai un autre texte a corriger, mais le probléme je n'arrive pas le faire avec 250 mots merci d'avance

1-We should not teach history in schools. History should be forgotten if we want to build a world without resentment. Discuss the pros and cons of this issue. (250 mots)

We should not teach the history in the schools. The history must be forgotten if we want to build a world without resentment. The advantages and the disadvantages of this question is that the teaching of the history is an obligation.

We allow to build us, compare, of knowing, to analyze to apprehend the world in which we live, it is teaching is essential to build our brain and our faculty of analysis it occupies a choice place in the general knowledge. It my helped understand from where we come and what we are. For my part, no one cannot be unaware of the history, if he wants to understand what he became.

The war, if one wants to live in a healthy world without reprisals, of hatred and of revenge it is necessary to stop teaching the history. But the disadvantage is that there are men, children and even of the women who died to save our country, and to honor their memory one owes them a worship of the memory it is a form of respect, not forgotten what each one did for its country, its fatherland and thus shown patriotism.

[Jean B]

Plutôt qu'une correction, trop fastidieuse, j'ai fait un "mix" à partir de ce que tu as écrit mais le total ne fait que 189 mots. Je te laisse le soin d'ajouter les 60 mots qui manquent.

On the one hand, I think that history should not be taught in schools and even be forgotten if we want to build a world without resentment. War memorials and war commemorations may somehow fuel hatred and feelings of revenge among certain weak-minded people, which might in the end lead to renewed fighting.

However we cannot ignore the sacrifices of men and women who fought and gave their lives to save ours or free our country so that learning history is a way to pay tribute to them, to honor their memories. Remembering what they did for their country is a form of respect we owe them just as a form of patriotism.

On the other hand, learning history allows us to develop our personality, compare, know, analyze, grasp the world in which we live. It is essential to build our brain and our faculty of analysis, it occupies a choice place in the general knowledge. It may help us to understand from where we come and what we are. For my part, no one can be unaware of history if we want to understand what we have become. (189 mots)

[mezi59]

merci de ton aide )