Besoin D'aide Pour Correction Texte Oral

[Sahel]

Hello!

En fait, pour mon oral bac d'Anglais je dois faire une fiche pour chaque notion. Et en voici une, et j'aimerais avoir de l'aide pour une éventuelle correction!

Je vous en remercie d'avance

I am going to talk about the notion "Spaces and exchanges" studied in a unit entitled "How good is globalization?"

First of all, I would like to give a definition of the word "exchange" : exchange may mean "a continous output" ; it often means " a continous movement or circulation ". It can also refer to " a general movement or tendency ".

In the unit, We focused on the economic exchanges and we'll weigh the pros and cons about globalization.

In the first place, I would like to define also the word "globalization" : Globalization is the system of interaction among the countries of the world in order to develop the global economy.

In order to illustrate the notion, I have chosen 2 documents : a text and a cartoon .

The first document which is a cartoon by Nickelson , shows us a workshop in Indonesia . We can see a white manager and on his tie, we can read the name of the company he works for "Nike". We have to know that Nike is a world famous american company which makes sportswear and trainers. We notice that the manager is yelling the famous Nike slogan " JUST DO IT " at frightened workers but here, the slogan is used to enslave people. He is the perfect image of a bully, he looks aggressive. We can also see workers bent over an assembly line making trainers. They look submissive aliened since they are exploited and treated lik cattle. To sum up, the aim of Nickelson is to show a bad aspect of globalization. He denounces here Nike's system and more generally multinational companies which have the monopoly worldwide. Finally, We can say that this cartoon is sharp criticism of globalization and relocation .

In the 2nd document which is an extract from "The Flat World" by Friedman , we have to deal with another point of view regarding globalization. Indeed, in this text , we have a testimony of an Indian girl who works for a multinational in India. She said that it's a good thing because she doesn't have to leave her family, her friends, to change her habits. Besides, she earns a good living . So why should she go to America? Moreover, in this text, we learn that American industry in India is booming. While India benefits from new jobs and a growth in multinational companies, the US economy equally benefits from products bought by Indian companies. In a nutshell, in this extract, globalization and outsourcing are very positivefor both countries.

To sum up and to conclude, I would say that globalization has its advantages but also its limits.

( et aussi si vous avez des idées pour ma conclusion? voilà merci )

[Jean B]

Hi again,

" I am going to talk about the notion "Spaces and exchanges" studied in a unit entitled "How good is globalization?"

First of all, I would like to give a definition of the word "exchange": exchange may mean "a continous output" ; it often means " a continous movement or circulation ". It can also refer to " a general movement or tendency ".

In the unit, we focused on the economic exchanges and we'll weigh the pros and cons about globalization.

In the first place, I would like to define also the word "globalization" : Globalization is the system of interaction among the countries of the world in order to develop the global economy.

In order to illustrate the notion, I have chosen 2 documents: a text and a cartoon .

The first document, which is a cartoon by Nickelson , shows us a workshop in Indonesia . We can see a white manager and on his tie, we can read the name of the company he works for "Nike". We have to know that Nike is a world famous American company which makes sportswear and trainers. We notice that the manager is yelling the famous Nike slogan " JUST DO IT " at frightened workers but here, the slogan is used to enslave people. He is the perfect image of a bully, he looks aggressive. We can also see workers bent over an assembly line making trainers. They look submissive aliened <??? <Qu'as-tu voulu dire ? since they are exploited and treated like cattle. To sum up, the aim of Nickelson is to show a bad aspect of globalization. Here he denounces Nike's system and more generally multinational companies which have the monopoly worldwide. Finally, we can say that this cartoon is a sharp criticism of globalization and relocation . <Pourquoi mets-tu la majuscule au pronom we dans le corps des phrases ?

In the 2nd document which is an extract from "The Flat World" by Friedman , we have to deal with another point of view regarding globalization. Indeed in this text we have a testimony of an Indian girl who works for a multinational in India. She said that it's a good thing because she doesn't have to leave her family, her friends, to change her habits. Besides, she earns a good living . So why should she go to America? Moreover in this text we learn that American industry in India is booming. While India benefits from new jobs and a growth in multinational companies, the US economy equally benefits from products bought by Indian companies. In a nutshell, in this extract, globalization and outsourcing are very positive for to both countries.

To sum up and to conclude, I would say that globalization has its advantages but also its limits.

( et aussi si vous avez des idées pour ma conclusion? voilà merci ) Tss, tss, tss...