Besoin D'aide Pour Un Exercice

[harmonie louvet]

Bonjour, j'aimerais qu'on me corrige SVP.

Voici l'énoné:

Summarizing: write one sentence for each paragraph.

For many people today, it is difficult to imagine life without a cellularphone. Once the preserve of the rich, they have now become an indispensable part of modern day life.

The technology for cellular phones was patented in 1975, but it was not until 1982 that the first commercial cell phone network was established in USA. Since that time , the cellular phone has changed from bulky machine to something that can fit into the palm of your hand.

Ths functions available in modern day cell phones are increasing rapidly. E-maik access is now standard.Cellular phone cameras,which were once little more than a gimmick , now rival stand -alone digital cameras in term of quality. With "third generation" telephones , broadband access offers the possibility of videos phones, television and full internet access.

Mon résumé:

Nowadays, its hard to imagine life without cell phones, at first it was only for riches ,they now become very important.

Which in term was imagined and was created in 1982 in USA. Since 1982 phones are more little day by day.

Mobiles are increasing very quickly,e- mail is standard , mobiles were more little than a gimmick now stand-alonedigital cameras, "third generation mobiles give us the possibility of lot of things such as video phone...

Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Sans vouloir te décourager, ton résumé est trop long. Il compte 76 mots alors que le texte n'en compte que 133.

L'énoncé précise que chaque paragraphe doit être résumé par une phrase.

Revois ta copie pour ne pas répéter le texte initial, résume-le.

[harmonie louvet]

Je vais retravailler sur mais est ce qu'il a une sens je veux dire est ce grammaticalement juste?

Et merci beaucoup

[harmonie louvet]

Bonjour, j'ai retravaillé sur mon résumé et je voudrais qu'on me dise si c'est bon grammaticalement.

Nowadays, its hard to imagine life without cell phones, at first it was only for riches ,they now become very important.

Which in term was imagined and was created in 1982 in USA. Since 1982 phones are more little day by day.

Mobiles are increasing very quickly,e- mail is standard , mobiles were more little than a gimmick now stand-alonedigital cameras, "third generation mobiles give us the possibility of lot of things such as video phone...

[huguesmorand]

A mon avis oui!

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Ce post étant de fait la suite de ton premier sujet, j'ai fusionné les deux.

Bonjour, j'ai retravaillé sur mon résumé et je voudrais qu'on me dise si c'est bon grammaticalement.

Nowadays it's hard to imagine life without cell phones which at first it was were only for the riches; they now become very important.

- Le pronom singulier "it" ne peut pas remplacer le nom pluriel "cell phones". Réfléchis à ce que tu écris, c'est du B.A.-BA.

- riches = nom pluriel = les richesses/l'argent. Au passage, je te rappelle que l'adjectif est INVARIABLE en anglais.

Which in term was imagined and was created in 1982 in USA. <Ça n'a ni queue ni tête ! Since 1982 cell phones are more little day by day have become smaller and smaller.

Mobiles are increasing very quickly,e- mail is standard , mobiles were more little than a gimmick now stand-alonedigital cameras, "third generation mobiles give us the possibility of lot of things such as video phone... Modern cell phones can also take photos, make videos, pick up television and log on the Internet.

[harmonie louvet]

Merci encore une fois.