Une Correction Svp

[harmonie louvet]

Bonjour, j'aimerais qu'on me corrige SVP.

Voici l'énoné:

Summarizing: write one sentence for each paragraph.

For many people today, it is difficult to imagine life without a cellularphone. Once the preserve of the rich, they have now become an indispensable part of modern day life.

The technology for cellular phones was patented in 1975, but it was not until 1982 that the first commercial cell phone network was established in USA. Since that time , the cellular phone has changed from bulky machine to something that can fit into the palm of your hand.

Ths functions available in modern day cell phones are increasing rapidly. E-maik access is now standard.Cellular phone cameras,which were once little more than a gimmick , now rival stand -alone digital cameras in term of quality. With "third generation" telephones , broadband access offers the possibility of videos phones, television and full internet access.

Mon résumé:

Nowadays, its hard to imagine life without cell phones, at first it was only for riches ,they now become very important.

Which in term was imagined and was created in 1982 in USA. Since 1982 phones are more little day by day.

Mobiles are increasing very quickly,e- mail is standard , mobiles were more little than a fimmick now stand-alonedigital cameras, "third generation mobiles give us the possibility of lot of things such as video phone...

Merci d'avance

[Nantaise]

Bonjour,

Quand tu dis "third generation...." Tu veux dire c est la troisième génération ou cela fait trois générations? Ce n'est pas très clair. Aussi, essaie de terminer avec une phrase de conclusion ton résumé... Sinon, c est bien !

[harmonie louvet]

Je veux dire la troisième génération. Et merci beaucoup pour la correction

patented in 1975, but it was not until 1982 et ce qu'on peut remplacer cette phrase par Which in term was imagined and was created in 1982.

[Nantaise]

Il faudra commencer par "the third generation of the mobile phones..." Oui on peut dire aussi which in term was imagined and was created in 1982

[harmonie louvet]

D'accord merci beaucoup