Correction + Aide Texte (Pour Oral De Bac)

[Sahel]

Bonjouuuur tout le monde!

Alors voilà, j'ai besoin d'un petit coup de main pour une éventuelle correction et si vous aviez qqidées pour la conclusion de ma séquence - ne serait-ce qu'en français.

C'est pour mon oral de bac, je ne compte pas apprendre tout celà par coeur, mais je prefère avoir une trace écrite alors voilà :

I'm going to talk about the idea of progress in a unit entitled "What's the legacy of the 60's?"

First of all, I would like to give a definition of the word "progress". "Progress" may mean "forward movement" ; it often means " advance". It can also refer to " the progressive development of humankind".

In order to illustrate the notion, I have chosen 3 documents : a text, an advert and a dialogue from a movie.

The first which is a text extracted by a website shows that the 60s were revolutionary. Indeed, in this text, we talk about the frenzy when the UK won the world cup. Moreover, music, people and fashioned designed launched new trends and revolutionized the world with icons like Twiggy. People were cool and confident about the future. Then, in the third paragraph it's about " drugs, hippy anti-establishmentarianism and sexual revolution ". So , we can say that the 60s were a counter-culture because young people wanted to get vid of the values and habits of older generations.

The second document is a an ad for a food processor called "Kenwood Chef". We can see a couple : the man seems to wear a black suit, and the woman is wearing a chef's hat. We also see the food processor in question : it's white and rather big. We can suppose that it's a robot multifunction cooker because we can see dishes and also drinks on the table. On this advertising, there is also a slogan which proves it " The Chef does everything". But the complete slogan is " The Chef does everything but cook - that's what wives are for! " and this sentence shows the role of the women and implies that women have to stay at home and to cook.

But in the third and last document which is an extract from the movie Made in Dagenham , we attend a feminist revolution. In fact, it's a dialogue between Rita O'Grady who is a sewing machinist at the Ford car Company in Dagenham, and Barbara Castle who is the secretary of state for employment. The scene takes place in the 60s and as a matter of fact, since she is underpaid and she is outraged by pay discrimination, Rita decided to voice her protest. She is an active, determined to fight for better wages. Here, she is brave enough to defy Barbara Castle to achieve her goal. Rita O'Grady demands there should be a guarantee of an Equal Pay Act but Barbara Castle implies that workers will have to be patient because big issues were still in the hands of men. In the meantime, a woman's salary should amount to 90% of a man's salary according to Rita. In short, women wanted to be on an equal footing with man and they almost succeeded.

Voili, voilouu! Désolé, c'est un peu long.. Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I'm going to talk about the idea of progress in a unit entitled "What's the legacy of the 60s?"

First of all, I would like to give a definition of the word "progress". "Progress" may mean "forward movement" ; it often means " advance". It can also refer to " the progressive development of humankind".

In order to illustrate the notion, I have chosen 3 documents : a text, an advert and a dialogue from a movie.

The first document which is a text extracted by from a website shows that the 60s were revolutionary. Indeed this text we talk about deals with the frenzy when the UK won the world cup. Moreover music people and fashioned designers launched new trends and revolutionized the world with icons like Twiggy. People were cool and confident about the future. Then in the third paragraph it's about " drugs, hippy anti-establishmentarianism and sexual revolution ". So , we can say that the 60s were a counter-culture because young people wanted to get rid of the values and habits of older generations.

The second document is a an ad for a food processor called "Kenwood Chef". We can see a couple: the man seems to be wearing a black suit and the woman is wearing a chef's hat. We also see the food processor in question: it's white and rather big. We can suppose that it's a robot multifunction cooker food processor because we can see dishes and also drinks on the table. On this advertisement there is also a slogan which proves it " The Chef does everything". But the complete slogan is " The Chef does everything but cook - that's what wives are for! " and this sentence shows the role of the women and implies that women have to stay at home and to cook.

But in the third and last document which is an extract from the movie Made in Dagenham , we attend a feminist revolution. In fact, it's a dialogue between Rita O'Grady who is a sewing machinist at the Ford car Company in Dagenham, and Barbara Castle who is the secretary of state for employment. The scene takes place in the 60s and as a matter of fact, since she is underpaid and she is outraged by pay discrimination, Rita decided to voice her protest. She is an activist, determined to fight for better wages. Here, she is brave enough to defy Barbara Castle to achieve her goal. Rita O'Grady demands there should be a guarantee of an Equal Pay Act but Barbara Castle implies that workers will have to be patient because big issues were still in the hands of men. In the meantime, a woman's salary should amount to 90% of a man's salary according to Rita. In short, women wanted to be on an equal footing with men and they almost succeeded.

Attention à ton emploi des temps. En anglais, le récit se fait au preterit, pas au présent et même si tu souhaites rendre ton exposé plus vivant.

Voili, voilouu! Désolé, c'est un peu long.. Merci d'avance

[Sahel]

D'accord, merci beaucoup pour la correction!