Correction texte

[LC29]

Bonjour ,

j'aurais besoin d'aide pour corriger cette expression écrite , j'ai déja corrigé par moi même mais ayant un faible niveau en anglais , j'ai peur de faire des fautes de bases , pouvez vous m'aider s'il vous plait ? merci d'avance !!

On July, 8th, 1982 , an intruder managed to get into Buckingham palace and into the Queen's bedroom. When the Queen saw him ,she was surprised, she had a little cry of fear.Someone knocked at the door and asked with a masculine voice " everything is well Your Majesty ? ", she replied " yes, don't worry". She examined the foreigner and uttered three words " who are you ? ". The man begged " Your Majesty Please , don't tell that I am here, I must tell you something ". The Queen asked that she must call the security .The intruder got up abruptly, and implored the Queen " I just want say that I am here because , I have a problem with my wife , she doesn't want speak with me , I want that you send a letter where you ask to come here , in Buckingahm . She likes you , she can't refuse. I will be here to speak with her , she will can't flee , she will must speak with me . Please Your Majesty , send a letter ". The queen was very suprised about his request , finally , she answered " Sir , I have duties and I have not the time for that but If I have a little time , I will send this letter , give me the Name of your Wife ". With a smile the intruder pronounced the name " Kate Middleton". The Queen was shocked ,she understanded that this man was crazy, she called the security ,. She heard the last words of the intruder " Kate Middleton is my wife, I love she , she loves me ..."

Les phrases en rouge sont les phrases pour lesquelles je pense avoir faux.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Il y a une telle différence de niveau entre la majeure partie de ce texte, plutôt correcte, et les éléments en rouge, plutôt horribles, que j'en viens à me demander par quel étrange phénomène tu es tantôt bonne en anglais, tantôt médiocre voire pire...

Bizarre, non ? Peux-tu m'expliquer ça ?

On July 8th, 1982 an intruder managed to get into Buckingham palace and into the Queen's bedroom. When the Queen saw him, she was surprised, she / had a little cry of fear / shouted out in fright. Someone knocked at the door and asked with in a masculine voice " is everything is well all right Your Majesty? " She replied " yes, don't worry". She examined the foreigner and uttered three words " who are you? ". The man begged " Your Majesty please, don't tell anyone that I am here, I must tell you something ". The Queen asked said that she must call the security. The intruder got up abruptly and implored the Queen " I just want to say that I am here because I have a problem with my wife, she doesn't want to speak with me. Nouvelle phrase> I want that you to send a letter where in which you ask her to come here in Buckingham. She likes you, she can't refuse. I will be here to speak with her. She will can't won't be able to flee, she will must have to speak with me. Please Your Majesty, send a letter ". The queen was very suprised about his request. Nouvelle phrase> Finally she answered " Sir, I have duties and I have not the time for that but If I have a little time I will send this letter. Nouvelle phrase> Give me the name of your Wife ". With a smile the intruder pronounced the name " Kate Middleton". The Queen was shocked, she understanded understood that this man was crazy so she called the security. She heard the last words of the intruder " Kate Middleton is my wife, I love she her, she loves me ..."