Correction

[lippow]

Bon, ma professeur d'anglais nous a donné une rédaction (140 mots) sur notre premiere journée de cours. Je l'ai faite elle la lu et ma dit que il y avait pas mal de fautes.

When, I awoke, the stress was already in me : fear of knowing anybody and not finding my class. At half past seven, i arrived at the high school : some pupils cried, other were delighted. I traversed (c'est moche et pense veut rien dire) the list and i felt small, i knew anybody. Gradually, the teacher called the pupils and i realized (repetition) in my class, there was nobody of last year. But suddenly,when i look "clémence" i realized(repetiton) that i knew a large majority of the class : all the people of the previous years. The hours passed (moche), some friendly ship (lien d'amitier) were formed with "the unknows" and with last friends. I was very glad by was joined again friendly with people of which i was scrambled. The teachers look sympatic and we did timetable, we read the rules in the morning. Ieat with friend. In the afternoon, the courses begin. When the 5 hours ringing resounded, i leave the high school cheerful.

Donc voilà j'aurai bien voulu que vous me corrigier les fautes d'ortographe, de répitions , de lexique ou autre. LA prof note en fonction des idées, du lexique utilise ( donc si vous avez des meilleurs mots) et de la grammaire; MErci d'avance, Lucas

[Jean B]

Bonjour, Lucas.

Bon, ma professeur d'anglais nous a donné une rédaction (140 mots) sur notre première journée de cours. Je l'ai faite elle la lue et ma dit qu'il y avait pas mal de fautes. <C'est vrai, et en français aussi !

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Donc voilà j'aurais bien voulu que vous me corrigiez les fautes d'ortographe, de répétitions, de lexique ou autre. La prof note en fonction des idées, du lexique utilisé ( donc si vous avez des meilleurs mots) et de la grammaire; Merci d'avance, Lucas

[lippow]

Je te suis extrêmement reconnaissant

When I awoke, stress was already in me: fear of knowing nobody and not finding my class. At half past seven, I arrived at the high school: some pupils were crying, others were delighted. I glanced through the list and I felt small, I knew nobody. Gradually, the teacher called the pupils and I realized there was nobody of from last year in my form. But suddenly, when I saw Clémence I was aware that I knew a large majority of the class, all the people of the previous years. The hours went by, some friendship ties were made with the new ones and with last year's friends. I was very glad because I was friendly reunited with people I like. The teachers look likeable and dictated the timetable to us. We read the rules in the morning. The courses began in the afternoon. When the 5 o'clock bell rang, I left the high school cheerfully

Be careful not to repeat a mistake that has already been corrected!

Good job anyway!

[Maxzi]

Bonjour,

fear of knowing nobody and not finding my class

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

fear of knowing nobody and not finding my class

[Maxzi]

OK,

au temps pour moi.