Rédaction

[rapsa]

bonjour

j'ai une rédaction a faire je les faite mais je ne suis pas sur pouvez vous me le corriger svp merci.

voici ma rédaction:

As every day at 10am I had a wash. Then had lunched at 12am seived wih the slice of bread and jam and with peanut butter, egg with merguez sausages and accompagned wholewheat bread cheese. The menus like caiscous with merguez sausages accompanied by ratatouille, rice and fish or of the mussels with chips... Then towards 02.00 pm devote myself to do my homework during three-four hours a day and the remainder of my after midday I play football with my friends.After returning home towards 07.00 pm I watched television: drawing animated,Egyptian film and American(like Medium or Dr.House in the original version with subtitles in French so that I can acquire much worlds of vocabulary). Then towards 8.00 pm I had dinner with my family then I devote myself to reading "Le Bonheur des Dames d'Emile Zola whom our French teacher said to us to read.Towards 10:30pm I diverted myself playing cards with my sisters. I was the routine.But at certain days i wanted to do other things more friendly,nice such as for example going to the swimming pool with friends. AT Other days my friend and i decided to do evening typically Americain,Japonese,and even Indien a and at last Egyptien so thateach one of us discoverred savours of the other cultures.It was funny and diverting because at least one among us did it when he ate the dish ofthe evenig.It either was too salted,or too spiced or "without taste"

merci

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

J'ai une rédaction à faire. Je l'ai faite mais je ne suis pas sûr. Pouvez-vous me la corriger SVP ? Merci.

Voici ma rédaction:

As every day at 10 am, I <had> have a wash. Then I <had> have lunch<ed> at 12 am served wih <the> a slice of bread and jam, <and with> peanut butter, egg with merguez sausages and <accompagned> some wholewheat bread with cheese. <The> Sometimes I have menus like couscous with merguez sausages <accompanied by> and ratatouille, rice and fish or <of the> mussels with chips... Then towards 02.00 pm I devote myself to doing my homework during three-four hours a day and the remainder of my afternoon <midday> I play football with my friends. After returning home towards 07.00 pm I <watched> watch television: <drawing animated> cartoons, Egyptian <film> and American films like Medium or Dr.House in the original version with subtitles in French so that I can acquire <much> many words of vocabulary. Then towards 8.00 pm I have dinner with my family then I devote myself to reading "Au Bonheur des Dames by Emile Zola <whom> which our French teacher <said to> told us to read. Towards 10:30pm I <diverted myself playing> play cards with my sisters. It was the routine. But <at> on certain days I wanted to do other <things> more friendly, nice things such as for example going to the swimming pool with friends. <AT> Some other days my friends and I decided to <do> organize <evening> typically American, Japanese, and even Indian and at last Egyptian parties so that each one of us discovered savours of <the> other countries and cultures. It was funny and <diverting> entertaining because at least one among us did it when he ate the dish of the evening. It either was too salted,or too spiced or "without taste".

merci