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[nair]

Bonjour et bonne fête!!!!!! Voila j'ai un commentaire a faire et je voudrais que l'on corrige mes fautes s'il vous plais et voir si on ne peut pas améliorer certaines tournures merci!!!

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This document is an advertisement form NTT DOCOMO. DOCOMO is the leading mobile communications operator in Japan.

The lastest subscriber figures are date January 2002. So this ad must been published soon after(winter or spring,2002)

It’s an ad for I-mode,I-mode is a service that allows you to surf the web with your mobile .The name indicates, is I-area ‘s service. I can see on the screen, I-area give information on area.

I-mode uses a subset of HTML , contrary to WAP ,which isn’t HTML compatible.

I can see on the ban websites: www.nttdocomo.com. On the top-left, I can see a clapboard, It’s a part of a serie actor I-mode because with I-mode you can access different service on this internet and describe a service.

The scene take place in the café in Tokyo. It’s a rendez vous with two people ( woman and boy). The woman is late because it’s a cliché. The woman has to find a place for Yoko’s after wedding party,

She want the man to help her. The man decide to use his mobile to find a place:

First able, he connects to I-mode on the first screen. She has scroll on press enter or OK.The man opening menu.On the menu, there are different Item for example My Menu Weeky Menu,Appli search….It’s a list on numbed item. The man select I area because It’s highlighted.

Inside on Iarea, The ma look for different town and select Ginza because Ginza is a riche place on Tokyo.

On the following illustration, I can see different “cuisine Genre». The man decide to select Bar and the next illustration (“Venue”) He select Cornucopia.

The Two following illustrations have the same menu. The last screen is the chart which shows the localization of the restaurant

To finish I think that I mode it looks very convents

[nair]

Bonjour et bonne fête!!!!!! Voila j'ai un commentaire a faire et je voudrais que l'on corrige mes fautes s'il vous plais et voir si on ne peut pas améliorer certaines tournures merci!!!

:

This document is an advertisement form NTT DOCOMO. DOCOMO is the leading mobile communications operator in Japan.

The latest subscriber figures are date January 2002. So this ad must have been published soon after(winter or spring,2002)

It’s an ad for I-mode ,I-mode is a service that allows you to surf the web with your mobile .The name indicates is I-area ‘s service.

I-mode uses a subset of HTML , contrary to WAP ,which isn’t HTML compatible.

We can see on the ban websites: www.nttdocomo.com. On the top-left, I can see a clapboard, It’s a part of a serie actor I-mode because with I-mode you can access different service on this internet and describe a service.

The scene takes place in the café in Tokyo. It’s a rendezvous with two people ( woman and boy). The woman is late because it’s a cliché. The woman has to find a place for Yoko’s after wedding party.

She wants the man to help her. The man decides to use his mobile to find a place:

First able, he connects to I-mode on the first screen. She has scroll on press enter or OK.The man opening menu.On the menu, there are different Item for example My Menu Weeky Menu,Appli search….It’s a list on numbed item. The man select I area because It’s highlighted.

Inside on Iarea, The man look for different town and select Ginza because Ginza is a riche place on Tokyo.

On the following illustration, I can see different “cuisine Genre». The man decides to select Bar and the next illustration (“Venue”) He selects Cornucopia.

The Two following illustrations have the same menu. The last screen is the chart which shows the localization of the restaurant

To finish I think that , I mode looks very convents.

[nair]

Le texte a coriger est celui qui est au dessus j'i fait quelques modifications Bonne année 2009!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

This document is an advertisement from<(?) NTT DOCOMO. DOCOMO is the leading mobile communications operator in Japan.

The latest subscriber figures are dated January 2002. So this ad must have been published soon after (winter or spring, 2002)

It’s an ad for I-mode which is a service that allows you to surf the web with your mobile. The name indicated<(?) is I-area <‘s> service. <(cas possessif impossible)

I-mode uses a subset of HTML, contrary to WAP which isn’t HTML compatible.

We can see on the banner<(?) websites: www.nttdocomo.com. On the top-left, I can see a clapboard, It’s a part of a series actor I-mode because with I-mode you can access different services on the internet and describe a service.

The scene takes place in <the> a café in Tokyo. It’s a rendez-vous with two people ( woman and boy). The woman is late because it’s a cliché. The woman has to find a place for Yoko<’s> after the wedding party.

She wants the man to help her. The man decides to use his mobile to find a place:

First <able>, he connects to I-mode on the first screen. She has Scroll on/Press Enter or OK.<(?) The man has<(?) opening menu. On the menu, there are different items for example My Menu /Weeky Menu/ Application/ Search<(?)….It’s a list on numbered items. The man selects I-area because It’s highlighted.

Inside I-area, the man looks for different towns and selects Ginza because Ginza is a rich place in Tokyo.

On the following illustration, I can see different “cuisine Genre». The man decides to select Bar and the next illustration (“Venue”) He selects Cornucopia.

The two following illustrations have the same menu. The last screen is the chart which shows the localization of the restaurant

To finish I think that I mode looks very convenient.

Mes <(?) traduisent mon incompréhension de ce que tu souhaitais dire et ma perplexité quant à la solution proposée. Entre nous, je mets quiconque au défi de comprendre ce dont il s'agit.

- S au présent du verbe dont le sujet est singulier. C'est une règle élémentaire à respecter scrupuleusement.

Bonne chance.

[nair]

Merci JRB d'avoir répondue bonne année tout d'abord !!! Ensuite au sujet de tes réflexion il n'y a pas de texte dans le document c'est un publicité avec juste 3 ou4 phrases le reste se sont des illustrations mais il faut le mettre au présent .

Pour répondre a t'ai <(?) :

le 1er je voulais dire que c'est une publicité de la société NTTDOCOMO c'est au japon

le 2ème on peut enlever la phares elle ne sert a rien

le 3ème Sur La bannière on voit comme information l'adresse du site de la societe

le 4ème on peut aussi l'enlever

le 5ème et le 6ème j'ai fait cette phares et dit moi si c'est plus compréhensible : "The man has opening menu And the menu contains different items for example My Menu /Weeky Menu/ Application/ Search….It’s a list on numbered items. The man selects I-area because It’s highlighted.

Voila j'espère que ceci ta un peu aidé sur l'anglais "Incopréhensible lol" que j'ai écrit

merci et Bonne année

[nair]

Merci JRB d'avoir répondue bonne année tout d'abord !!! Ensuite au sujet de tes réflexion il n'y a pas de texte dans le document c'est un publicité avec juste 3 ou4 phrases le reste se sont des illustrations mais il faut le mettre au présent .

Pour répondre a t'ai <(?) :

le 1er je voulais dire que c'est une publicité de la société NTTDOCOMO c'est au japon

le 2ème on peut enlever la phares elle ne sert a rien

le 3ème Sur La bannière on voit comme information l'adresse du site de la societe

le 4ème on peut aussi l'enlever

le 5ème et le 6ème j'ai fait cette phares et dit moi si c'est plus compréhensible : "The man has opening menu And the menu contains different items for example My Menu /Weeky Menu/ Application/ Search….It's a list on numbered items. The man selects I-area because It's highlighted.

Voila j'espère que ceci ta un peu aidé sur l'anglais "Incopréhensible lol" que j'ai écrit

merci et Bonne année