Anglais Oral [urgent ]

[vyns]

Bonjour tout le monde,

j'ai fait une rédaction en anglais mais je voudrais avoir votre avis si il y des fautes d'expressions, de grammaires ou de vocabulaires avant de le rendre ^^

This document is a screenplay extract from the film called Gattaca, publiqh in 1997. Gattaca is a science-fiction film. The autor is Andrew Niccol. Tje title of this extract is " Human Possibilities " and it refers to the genetic manipulation. The scene takes place in the futur.

In this texte, thereare four characters : vincent ,Maria , Antonio and the geneticist.

The main characters are Antonio and Maria.

They are consulting the geneticist because Maria have been fertilized and she select one pre-embryos.

Maria and Antonio is a couple ans wantedto create a baby by in vitro.

They wanted a perfect baby and made to measure baby. They could choice diferent fichs about description of the child.

They make up the skill : tall , fair skin , dark hair , blues eyes , inteligent , no violence , no myopia, no alcoholism , no obesity and premature baldness.

On the whole, I suggest to decompose the study in 2 parts.

First of all , we will speak about characters's relation. Then , in the second part , we will talk about the criticism of the extract.

The genetist does his job wjen he created babies. It was normal for him.

We have the impression that he sells babies without emotions because in this extract , he destroyed embryos.

He doesn't take the embryos for human beings but like 'human possibilities ' . He prefered to earn the most possible money by selling skills.

We have too the impression that the manipulation genetic was powerfull matterof fact.

As for the couple, this genetic manipulation was new and very important.

They wanted the best child but it could not afford the best and Maria was very nervous.

She was worried too about her pre-embryos because it could be destroy.

Merci

[Invité hannah_*]

Salut, bon je suis pas prof et je ne te promets pas monts et merveilles, mais j'ai un assez bon niveau d'anglais (je suis en terminale ES avec anglais spé), je vais corriger les ptites choses qui paraissent fausses. =).

This document is a screenplay extract from the film called Gattaca, published in 1997. Gattaca is a science-fiction film. The autor is Andrew Niccol. The title of this extract is " Human Possibilities " and it refers to the genetic manipulation. The scene takes place in the future.

In this texte, there are four characters : vincent ,Maria , Antonio and the geneticist.

The main characters are Antonio and Maria.

They are consulting the geneticist because Maria have been fertilized and she selects one pre-embryos.

Maria and Antonio is a couple ans want to create a baby by means of vitro.

They want a perfect baby and made to measure baby. They could choice different fichs about description of the child.

They make up the skill : tall , fair skin , dark hair , blues eyes , intelligent , no violence , no myopia, no alcoholism , no obesity and premature baldness.

On the whole, I suggest to decompose the study in 2 parts.

First of all , we will speak about characters' relationship. Then , in the second part , we will talk about the criticism of the extract.

The genetist does his job when he creates babies. It is normal for him.

We have the impression that he sells babies without emotions because in this extract , he has destroyed embryos.

He doesn't take the embryos for human beings but like 'human possibilities ' . He prefers to earn the most possible money by selling skills.

We also have the impression that the manipulation genetic was powerful matterof fact.

As for the couple, this genetic manipulation is new and very important.

They want the best child but it could not afford the best and Maria is very nervous.

She is also worried about her pre-embryos because it could be destroyed.

J'espère t'avoir aidé(e)!

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

This document is a screenplay extract from the film called Gattaca, published in 1997. Gattaca is a science-fiction film. The author is Andrew Niccol. The title of this extract is "Human Possibilities " and it refers to genetic engineering. The scene takes place in the future.

In this text, there are four characters: Vincent, Maria, Antonio and the geneticist.

The main characters are Antonio and Maria.

They are consulting the geneticist because Maria has been fertilized and she has selected one pre-embryo.

Maria and Antonio are a couple who want to create a baby by the in vitro method.

They want a perfect and made-to-measure baby. They can choose the child from different descriptive files.

The chosen baby will be tall, fair skinned, dark haired, blues eyed, intelligent, non-violent. He will neither be short-sighted, nor alcoholic, nor obese, nor prematurely bald.

On the whole, I suggest to split up the study in 2 parts.

First of all, we will speak about the characters' relation. Then, in the second part, we will criticize the extract.

The geneticist does his job when he creates babies. It is normal for him.

We have the impression that he sells babies without feeling any emotion because in this extract, he destroys embryos.

He doesn't take the embryos for human beings but like 'human possibilities '. He prefers to earn the most money he possibly can by selling skills.

We also have the impression that genetic engineering is powerfully matter-of-fact.

As for the couple, this genetic engineering was new and very important.

They wanted the best child but they could not afford the best one and Maria was very nervous.

She was worried too about her pre-embryo because it could be destroyed.

· Le moins que je puisse dire, c'est que ton analyse est plutôt confuse. Une chatte n'y retrouverait pas ses petits.

· Ensuite, le plus insupportable, c'est que tu mélanges les temps verbaux en permanence.

· J'ai rectifié pour la plupart en les mettant au présent. A toi de voir si tu le conserves ou si tu racontes tout au passé. Cela me semblerait plus logique étant donné que tu rapportes des faits révolus.