Correction De Rédaction

[Dj-dj67]

Bonjour à tous, je dois rédiger un article en anglais sur la mort d'un personnage, je dispose de 3 témoignages, et de quelques autres documents.

Je viens surtout pour me faire corriger les (nombreuses) fautes de syntaxe et d'expression.

Si vous voulez ajouter uen remarque ou me dire si il y a des choses à ajouter je ne suis pas contre

J'espère que quelqu'un pourra m'aider, c'est un devoir à rendre vendredi.

The Cliff of the death.

In the morning of September the first, a body was found on the stony beach at the foot of the Dark Cliffs.

It's matter of an old man of about fifty years called Lord Westmorland. Lord Westmorland was the owner of the famous Westmorland castle, one of the most beautiful and romantic castles on the southern coast of Devon.

Every morning, Lord Westmorland was having a walk on the cliffs with his dog, explain Timothy Dryfather, the inspector in charge of the investigation.

There are three possibilities, continue Timothy Dryfather, perhaps Lord Westmorland killed himself, but it might be an accident or a murder too.

One witness, Frank Cobry, claim to have seen shortly him for the last time around 6 a.m. He had spoken with him a few time before his death.

He adds that obviously, Lord Westmorland didn't want to talk and looked worried.

Two other witnesses, Marmaduke Arbuthnot, a former colonel who is retired from army now, and Bernie Brown, a fisherman tell us some informations about Lord Westmorland.

Bernie Brown found the body lying dead on the beach and was intrigued, that's why he landed on the coast.

Then, he rushed to the Old Chapel ( the nearest place) and called the police.

According to M.Abruthnot, who was under Lord Westmorland command, Lord Westmorland was a very secretiv man. Marmaduke didn't like him a lot for the simple reason that he was too arrogant and very ambitious. Marmaduke learnt indeed that Lord Westmorland had become famous because he crushed Indians rebellions un Calcutta.

Three years ago, Lord Westmorland's wife died in the same place hence it might be a suicide.

However, he was havinf a walk every days, so it may be an accident.

The autopsy of the body will learn us certainly more about the death of Lord Westmorland.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

The Cliff of <the> death.<(pas de "the" devant un nom abstrait pris dans son sens général)

In the morning of September <the first> 1st, a body was found on the stony beach at the foot of the Dark Cliffs.

<It's matter of> They speak about / It's about / an old man of about fifty years called Lord Westmorland. Lord Westmorland was the owner of the famous Westmorland castle, one of the most beautiful and romantic castles on the southern coast of Devon.

Every morning, Lord Westmorland was having a walk on the cliffs with his dog, says / explains Timothy Dryfather, the inspector in charge of the investigation.

There are three possibilities, goes on / continues Timothy Dryfather, perhaps Lord Westmorland killed himself, but it might be an accident or a murder too.

One witness, Frank Cobry, claims <to have seen shortly> he briefly saw him for the last time around 6 a.m. He had spoken with him a few <time> moments / minutes before his death.

He adds that obviously, Lord Westmorland didn't want to talk and looked worried.

Two other witnesses, Marmaduke Arbuthnot, a former colonel who is retired from the army now, and Bernie Brown, a fisherman tell us some information<s> <(indénombrable singulier) about Lord Westmorland.

Bernie Brown found the body lying dead on the beach and was intrigued, that's why he landed on the coast.

Then, he rushed to the Old Chapel (the nearest place) and called the police.

According to M.Abruthnot, who was under Lord Westmorland command, Lord Westmorland was a very secretive man. Marmaduke didn't like him a lot for the simple reason that he was too arrogant and very ambitious. Marmaduke learnt indeed that Lord Westmorland had become famous because he crushed Indians rebellions in Calcutta.

Three years ago, Lord Westmorland's wife died in the same place, hence it might be a suicide.

However, he was having a walk every day<s> <(singulier après every), so it may be an accident.

The autopsy of the body will <learn> teach us certainly more about the death of Lord Westmorland.

* Relis-toi attentivement, ne serait-ce que pour mettre le S au présent du verbe dont le sujet est singulier et rectifier les fautes de frappe.

Attention : learn = apprendre en tant qu'élève <--> teach = apprendre en tant qu'enseignant, enseigner.

Néanmoins, c'est du bon travail.

[Dj-dj67]

Merci pour la correction, je prends note !

[Jean B]

Avec plaisir.