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[yanyan0505]

HAve you ever witnessed a strange scene? (200 words)

One day, Monique, a family's friend told me about birds after her parent's death. She said me about her father :" After his death, a dove came to my window everdy day at the same hour. It was strange. But, after the death of my mother, I can have seen tow doves at the date.

I was surprised by this story but I tought " It's just a coincidence".

However, one year later, my greatfather died. At this moment, I remembered the story... I was in the garden with my mother, seeing the sky when I saw a dove ! I was totally astonished. The dove was here! Suddenly I tought "it's the spirit of my greatfather".

Seven month later, my greatfather died. This day, I waited two doves in my garden. There was two doves in the sky. They saw me, I saw their, like a final good bye...

I saw this doves only one time because, when they are alive, they dreamt of travel.

Voilà, je pense qu'il y a des fautes de temps. Si vous pouvez m'eclaircir, merci.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

HAve you ever witnessed a strange scene? (200 words)

One day, Monique, a family<'s> friend told me about birds after her parents'<s> death. She said <me> about her father:"After his death, a dove came to my window every day at the same hour. It was strange. But, after the death of my mother, I <can have seen> could see two doves <at> on the date.

I was surprised by this story but I thought "It's just a coincidence".

However, one year later, my grandfather died. At that moment, I remembered the story... I was in the garden with my mother, <seeing> looking at the sky when I saw a dove! I was totally astonished. The dove was here! Suddenly I thought<(bis) "it's the spirit of my grandfather".

Seven months later, my grandmother<(je suppose) died. That day, I waited for two doves to come in my garden. There <was> were two doves in the sky. They saw me, I saw them, like a final goodbye...

I saw these doves only <one time> once because, when they <are> were still alive, <they> my grandparents <(je suppose aussi) dreamt of travelling.

Voilà, je pense qu'il y a des fautes de temps. <(Pas seulement...)Si vous pouvez m'éclairer, merci.

* Conseil : relis-toi attentivement pour éliminer ne serait-ce que les fautes d'étourderie...

[yanyan0505]

Excuse moi de pas avoir répondu avant mais j'étais pressé ce jour là. J4ai bien prit en compte tes modifications ainsi que de mes fautes d'étourderie. J4ai même compris mes fautes.

MErci