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Bonjour,

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Mon texte:

We will first see the consequences of the new immigration points-based system on the the British industries.

It is explained in this article that some indutries employ many unskilled immigrants because the cost of this particular labour is cheaper.

As said very clearly in the text,at line 25"Some industries that relied on cheap labour".

In this sentence, one can understand here that employing unskilled immigrants can be attractive for some industries because their wages are not so high as those of the British workers.

Moreover, they are less demanding and protesting because they know they are in a precarious situation and not at all in a strength position.

However, the strengthening of controls such as identity cards controls and a ban for unskilled immigrants from outside Europe to come and work in the UK will lead to the anger of some industries used to hire them.

The journalist reports that at line 24 from 25"He envisaged that this would anger some indutries that relied on cheap labour".

In fact,the limits could hurt the business of some industries.

In addition, the minister of the Office, Liam Byrne does not want the immigration policy in the UK to be conducted by the industries.

More precisely,this is well illustrated in line 26"He was not going to let government policy be driven by these industries".

In other words, we can understand that Byrne does not wish to conduct just an economic policy but also a social policy in the Britain's national interest.

As it is written in this article, the minister of office thinks that the new immigration system could not hurt the business community because according to Byrne, the EU immigrants could fill the lowest-wages jobs.

We can read that at line 29 from 30"...it was expected to lead to low-skilled jobs being filled by EU immigrants...".

But some industries were unable to fill all the jobs with only European immigrants.

As described at line 31"Some industries have expressed concern that they might able to fill all jobs with EU workers.

I can suppose that there is a lack of manpower European unskilled wishing to fill in those positions.

To conclude my part,we can see a paradox in this article.

Indeed, Britons want to control immigration.

On the one hand, British industries need taskforce,on the other hand, Britons don't want to do menial jobs that foreigners were ready to fill.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

We will first see the consequences of the new immigration points-based system on the British industries.

It is explained in this article that some industries employ many unskilled immigrants because the cost of this particular labour is cheaper.

As said very clearly in the text, at line 25 "Some industries that relied on cheap labour".

In this sentence, one can understand here that employing unskilled immigrants can be attractive for some industries because their wages are not so high as those of the British workers.

Moreover, they are less demanding and protesting because they know they are in a precarious situation and not at all in a strength position.

However, the strengthening of controls such as identity cards controls and a ban for unskilled immigrants from outside Europe to come and work in the UK will lead to the anger of some industries used to hire them.

The journalist reports that from line 24 to 25 "He envisaged that this would anger some industries that relied on cheap labour".

In fact, the limits could hurt the business of some industries.

In addition, the minister of the Office, Liam Byrne does not want the immigration policy in the UK to be conducted by the industries.

More precisely, this is well illustrated in line 26 "He was not going to let government policy be driven by these industries".

In other words, we can understand that Byrne does not wish to conduct just an economic policy but also a social policy in Britain's national interest.

As it is written in this article, the minister of office thinks that the new immigration system could not hurt the business community because according to Byrne, the EU immigrants could fill the lowest-wages jobs.

We can read that from line 29 to 30 "...it was expected to lead to low-skilled jobs being filled by EU immigrants...".

But some industries were unable to fill all the jobs with only European immigrants.

As described at line 31"Some industries have expressed concern that they might be able to fill all jobs with EU workers.

I can suppose that there is a lack of European unskilled manpower wishing to fill in those positions.

To conclude my part, I can see a paradox in this article.

Indeed, Britons want to control immigration.

On the one hand, British industries need taskforce, on the other hand Britons don't want to do menial jobs that foreigners were ready to fill.

* Good job!