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[Lisaatwood95]

Bonnjour, est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait corriger mon texte svp?
C'est pour mardi et c'es le seul moyen de remonter ma moyenne et de passer l'année...

Because she was born on the second eclipse of the moon, Tania is a special girl and for her futur job, she three choices:
either becoming a magician or an animal keeper or working in politics. If she chooses to become a magician, she will have to do an apprenticeship for two hundred years. She thinks it is a bit too long but she hesitates because afterwards she she would be really powerful and could become the biggest magician of her planet. Otherwise, she is hesitating with being an animal keeper and in this job she would have to check that everybody becomes a good animal after his dead. She thinks it is a little bit sad as a job. The last one, the job in politics, she she doesn't want to do it, for her it is too serious and she has never liked politics. She has just to choose between the other ones and then she will be able to begin her apprenticeship. She is not going to get married because she prefers living alone. Her dream is not to have a big house or a beautiful husband like her friends, she just would like to live close to the nature with some animals and to have a quiet life. For the moment, she does not want to have any children but she is thinking about adopting one.

Her unrealistic dream is that she could create a little planet close to hers and live on it alone, just have what she needs, not destroy it like we are doing on the earth, but she knows that it is impossible, but she goes on to hope...

[JRB]

Bonjour,

Lisaatwood95, le 29 mai 2011 - 19:05, dit :

Bonnjour, est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait corriger mon texte SVP ?
C'est pour mardi et c'est le seul moyen de remonter ma moyenne et de passer l'année...

Because she was born on the second eclipse of the moon, Tania is a special girl and for her future job, she  has three choices: either becoming a magician or an animal keeper or working in politics. If she chooses to become a magician, she will have to do an apprenticeship for two hundred years. She thinks it is a bit too long but she hesitates because afterwards she would be really powerful and could become the biggest magician in her planet. Otherwise, she is hesitating with being an animal keeper and in this job she would have to check that everybody becomes a good animal after his dead they have died. She thinks it is a little bit sad as a job. The last one, the job in politics, she doesn't want to do it ; for her it is too serious and she has never liked politics. She has just to choose between the other two ones and then she will be able to begin her apprenticeship. She is not going to get married because she prefers living alone. Her dream is not to have a big house or a beautiful husband like her friends. She just would like to live close to the nature with some animals and (to) have a quiet life. For the moment, she does not want to have any children but she is thinking about adopting one.

Her unrealistic dream is that she could create a little planet close to hers and live on it alone, just have what she needs, not destroy it like we are doing on the Earth, but she knows that it is impossible, but  nevertheless she goes on to hope hoping... ( ou bien she continues to hope...)