harmonie louvet Posté(e) le 20 mai 2013 Signaler Posté(e) le 20 mai 2013 Bonjour, j'aimerais que vous corrigiez SVP. Voici le texte : In northern Dutch Netherland on september 21st a youngster wanted to celebrate her birthday party. She choses facebook invitation to invite her friends but she forgot to close it up therefore 3,000 people came to her birthday party . But infortunately it went wrong they damaged lampposts , streets sign ... It rurned in to a riot : 6 people were injured and 20 arrested. The funny thing is that Dutch is a very small city which has 18,000 habitants . 3,000 out of 18,000 were present in the party . Merci d'avance.
E-Bahut Jean B Posté(e) le 20 mai 2013 E-Bahut Signaler Posté(e) le 20 mai 2013 Bonjour, Bonjour, j'aimerais que vous corrigiez SVP. Voici le texte : In northern Dutch, the Netherlands on September 21st, a youngster wanted to celebrate her birthday party. She chose (1) Facebook invitation to invite her friends but (she) forgot to close it up. Nouvelle phrase> Therefore 3,000 people came to her birthday party. But which infortunately it went wrong. Nouvelle phrase> they (2) People/Guests damaged lampposts, streets sign ... It (3) The party turned into a riot : 6 people were injured and 20 arrested. The funny thing is that Dutch is a very small city which numbers/has 18,000 inhabitants. 3,000 out of 18,000 were present in at/attended the party . Merci d'avance.
harmonie louvet Posté(e) le 20 mai 2013 Auteur Signaler Posté(e) le 20 mai 2013 D'accord merci pour la correction et les conseilles. Merci beaucoup.
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