daouia Posté(e) le 8 novembre 2017 Signaler Share Posté(e) le 8 novembre 2017 bonjour, je dois raconter une histoire d'horreur en anglais . Pouvez-vous me corriger ? This is the story of two twin sisters named Lea and Lena who were best friends and loved each other more than anything. One day, Lena learned that she had a serious heart and liver disease and that she was going to die. Every day she cried and her sister was terribly sad. Then Lea decided to die in her place by offering her heart and liver but in exchange for a promise: every night she will have to say: "my sister, my best friend, I thank you, your heart, your liver, of your life "singing. Lena was very sorry but accepted. The operation took place and everything went well. Lena kept her promise for many years. One night she met a boy and forgot to keep his promise. She lay down and heard singing: "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in the living room" Lena went there without finding anything, thinking hallucinate. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in the kitchen" Lena went there and nothing either. She hugged her blanket. "I want, my heart, my liver, I go up the stairs" Lena looked at the stairs and no presence. She began to tremble. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in the bathroom" She found nothing either. She turns pale. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in your room" She went to her room and found nothing, again. She began to have a lump in her throat. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm under your bed" Lena looked under her bed and she saw nothing. She started crying. "I want, my heart, my liver, I am JUST THE !!" And Lea's spirit planted a knife in her back and recovered her heart and liver. The next day, Lea pretended to be Lena (they are twins) and neither the parents nor the friends noticed that it was not her . Lien vers le commentaire Partager sur d’autres sites More sharing options...
E-Bahut Jean B Posté(e) le 8 novembre 2017 E-Bahut Signaler Share Posté(e) le 8 novembre 2017 Bonjour et bienvenue sur e-bahut. This is the story of two twin sisters named Lea and Lena who were best friends and loved each other more than anything. One day, Lena learned that she had a serious heart and liver disease and that she was going to die. Every day she cried and her sister was terribly sad. Then Lea decided to die in her place by offering her heart and liver but in exchange for a promise: every night she (1) Lena will (2) would have to say: "my sister, my best friend, I thank you, your heart, your liver, of your life "singing. Lena was very sorry but accepted. The operation took place and everything went well. Lena kept her promise for many years. One night she met a boy and forgot to keep his (3) her promise. She lay down and heard singing: "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in the living room" Lena went there without finding anything, thinking hallucinate (4) she must be seeing things. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in the kitchen" Lena went there and nothing either. She hugged her blanket. "I want, my heart, my liver, I go up the stairs" Lena looked at the stairs and no presence. She began to tremble. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in the bathroom" She found nothing either. She turned (5) pale. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm in your room" She went to her room and found nothing, again. She began to have a lump in her throat. "I want, my heart, my liver, I'm under your bed" Lena looked under her bed and she saw nothing. She started crying. "I want, my heart, my liver, I am JUST THE...!" And Lea's spirit planted stuck a knife in her (6) Lena's back and recovered her heart and liver. The next day, Lea pretended to be Lena (they are (7) were twins) (7) and neither the parents nor the friends noticed that it was not her. < Certes mais l'absence de l'une des jumelles, quel que soit son nom, ne passera pas inaperçue indéfiniment. Comment la "survivante" l'expliquera-t-elle ? (1) L'emploi d'un pronom ne doit pas être ambigu. (2) Le conditionnel, pas le futur, il faut respecter la concordance des temps qui suit les mêmes règles qu'en français. (3) L'adjectif possessif doit être accordé en genre et en nombre avec le possesseur. Je sais que tu le sais mais pourquoi cette erreur ? (4) Une petite expression idiomatique pour rendre notre "Mais j'hallucine !" (5) et (7) Le récit doit être entièrement au passé. Relis toi toujours. (6) L'adjectif possessif est ambigu ici, d'où son remplacement par le nom. Lien vers le commentaire Partager sur d’autres sites More sharing options...
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