Correction

[Sonia123]

Bonjour vous pouvez me corriger ce devoir svp

"American progress is made with the western conquest.it's started with pioener s and settler who came from the east to the west to explore and cultivate the west still wild so they bring some light to the west dominate by the wildness and sauvagness. In fact we worked on a painting called american progress. This painting shows us an angel who enligthen the west and bring law andeducation to regulate the wildwest with a book in her hand.And in the picture we can see that some progress arrives from the east with the train railroad so it 's simbolized the evoltion of the transport.and the progress of technology with the telegraph.So we can say that she embodies the american progress because she brings positive changes to the west."

 

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

"American progress is was made with the western conquest. << Ça ne date pas d'hier = prétérit it's It started with pioneers and settlers << Il n'y en eut pas qu'un seul, voyons ! Relis-toi.  who came from the east to the west to explore and cultivate the west which was still wild. <<Nouvelle phrase>> So they bring brought << Récit = prétérit some light to the west dominated by the wildness of the land and sauvagness savageness of men. In fact we worked on a painting called American progress. << Majuscule aux adjectifs de nationalités This painting shows us an angel who enligthens the west and brings law and education to regulate the wildwest with a book in her hand. << -s final au présent simple d'un verbe dont le sujet est au singulier. Tu as intérêt à mémoriser ça, c'est une règle élémentaire. And in the picture we can see that some progress arrives from the east with the train railroad so it 's which symbolizes the evolution of the transport.and the progress of technology with the telegraph. So we can say that she embodies the American progress because she brings positive changes to the west." << Quel nom est censé remplacer ce pronom utilisé 2 fois ? Mystère ! Pour mémoire, un pronom remplace un nom sans aucune ambiguïté. Est-ce le cas ? Non. Autre rappel, il y a 3 pronoms sujet de la 3ème personne du singulier et aucun des 3 ne s'emploie au pif.

Je mentirais si j'écrivais que ton texte ne doit pas être amélioré ni ta réflexion approfondie.

[Sonia123]

Merci beaucoup je vais changé tout cela

et vous pouvez aussi corriger ce texte svp c'est pour un orale 

" The film simbolizes also an evolution and a progress because the film is started with a flashback and move to thé present.

At the beginning of the film, the figure of authorities are represented as a comic figures like the Marshall or newspaper editor. There wasn't educated people and it was tha law of violence and gun that dominated the town. And politically, it was an unregulated town and was not yet intepreted as a state in the US.

However during the film this bad situation change with the arrival of the lawyer because to the east he brings with him law and ordre and education to the people of the town.

And the dead of LV makes the town freedom and give a new way of life for the population thanks to the man who changes their life by killing LV.

[Jean B]

Bon, désolé, ce sera sans moi car tu multiplies les fautes et j'ai horreur de prêcher dans le désert. Si une âme plus charitable passe par ici, je lui laisse ma place volontiers.

[Micka82]

Salut, je préviens, je ne suis pas prof d'anglais, mais j'aime aider, alors si je peux apporter ma contribution... Je ne suis pas bilingue, donc ma correction n'est peut-être pas très optimale même si je pense, sans forfanterie, que ce sera toujours un peu mieux...:P

The film also alludes to the idea of progress because it starts with a flashback then comes back to the present.

At the beginning of the film, authority figures are represented as a comic figures like the Marshall or newspaper editor. There are no educated people and guns rule over the town. And politically, it was an unregulated town and was not yet intepreted as a state in the US. → Tu peux expliquer ce que tu voulais dire ? x)

However, this bad situation changes throughout the film with the arrival of the lawyer because to the east → à l'est ? he brings with him law, order and education to the people of the town.

And the death of LV makes the town free and brings a new way of life to the population. thanks to the man who changes their life by killing LV. → Ca fait un peu répétition quand-même, non ?