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[RyanG]

Bonsoir mon devoir consiste à décrire une image d'un film choisi (en 100 mots), j'aimerais savoir si mon texte est cohérent, s'il possède des erreurs quelconques. 

"in this picture we can see the main character who is driving in the darkness of the night. The point of view is situated inside of the car and we can see the driver from behind. He is holding the steering wheel of the car and we can perceive his face in the interior rear-view mirror. There is no one on the road in order to illustrate the loneliness of the driver. This picture is extracted from a telling scene of the movie because the movie begin and finish with a scene in which the main character drive alone in a dark road."

Je vous remercie d'avance

[Ezehkiel Jones]

Hello

il y a 48 minutes, RyanG a dit :

"In this picture we can see the main character who is driving in the darkness dark of the night. The point of view is situated The scene takes place inside of the a car and we can see the driver from behind the back. He is holding the steering wheel of the car (de quoi d'autre pourrait-il tenir le volant ?) and we can perceive see his face in the interior rear-view mirror. (Soit interior, soit rear-view. Les deux font beaucoup, même si c'est correct. J'opterais personnellement pour interior.) There is no one on the road, in order to illustrate which illustrates the loneliness of the driver. This picture is extracted from a telling scene of the movie because the this movie begins and finish ends (troisième personne du singulier = terminaison en s !) with a scene in which the main character drive driving alone in on a dark road."

Je vous remercie d'avance

Pense à alléger tes phrases ! 

Kind Regards,

[RyanG]

Merci beaucoup pour votre attention et pour votre conseil ! 

Mes phrases m'ont paru un peu complexes également, je tâcherai de garder cette remarque en tete pour mes prochaines expressions écrites 

Bonne soirée 

[Ezehkiel Jones]

You're welcome !

Bonne soirée toi aussi !