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[myrianis3]

Voilà, je dois faire un écrit sur un acteur célèbre ( j'ai choisi Tom Hanks) sans pouvoir citer l'acteur dans le texte et en privilégiant la carrière.
Merci pour toutes corrections =)

Born the 9th July 1956, He is an American and a famous actor since 1980. First of all, he worked in television and he played in small comedies. But one day, the famous director, Ron Howard auditioned him for a second role ; but Howard found her performance so great that he offered her the first role. And so, the film, “Splash”, became the start of her amazing career. Due to this film, he has known success, especially as a dramatic actor due to  several notable roles, including Commander Jim Lovell in Apollo 13, John H. Miller in Saving Private Ryan or Paul Egdecomb in the Green Mile. However, it’s with the film “ Forest Gump” that he became one of the most popular actors of the American cinema. Indeed, He won the Oscar for Best Actor for this film and for an other called “Philadephia” in 1993 .Then, He provided his voice to Woody in Toy Story. He is also the main actor of directors like Steven Spielberg. In fact, he produces films with him now, like “The Pacific”. Afterwards, he is also a writer and a director.
Finally, if I chose this actor, it will be because I really like his films and  I’ve seen the most of them. I find that his films are very interesting, funny and exciting. The topics of the stories are always affecting and intriguing and her way to play, too. It's a really fascinating actor.

[JRB]

Bonjour,

Il ne te reste qu'à corriger les erreurs balisées en rouge en tirant profit de mes annotations.

myrianis3, le 22 octobre 2011 - 19:32, dit :

Voilà, je dois faire un écrit sur un acteur célèbre ( j'ai choisi Tom Hanks) sans pouvoir citer l'acteur dans le texte et en privilégiant la carrière.
Merci pour toutes corrections =)

Born xx the 9th xx July 1956, He is an American and a famous actor since 1980.

- Revois l'expression de la date.
- le present perfect avec since, pas le présent.

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First of all, he worked in television and he played in small comedies.

la préposition est incorrecte.

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But one day, the famous director, Ron Howard auditioned him for a second role ; but Howard found her performance so great that he offered her the first role.

Je confirme que Tom Hanks est bien de sexe masculin.  

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And so, the film, "Splash", became the start of her amazing career. Due to this film, he has known success, especially as a dramatic actor due to  several notable roles, including Commander Jim Lovell in Apollo 13, John H. Miller in Saving Private Ryan or Paul Egdecomb in the Green Mile. However, it's with the film " Forest Gump" that he became one of the most popular actors of the American cinema. Indeed, He won the Oscar for Best Actor for this film and for another one called "Philadephia" in 1993 .Then, He provided his voice to Woody in Toy Story. He is also the main actor of directors like Steven Spielberg. In fact, he produces films with him now, like "The Pacific". Afterwards, he is also a writer and a director.
Finally, if I chose this actor, it will be because I really like his films and  I've seen the most of them. I find that his films are very interesting, funny and exciting. The topics of the stories are always affecting and intriguing, and her way to play so is his acting too. It's a really fascinating actor.

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