Urgent pour demain, corrigez mes fautes svp

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Voici la suite d'un texte parlant de 2 jeunes garçons qui viennent d'être interviewés à propos de braconnier sévissant dans le plus grand parc national d'Afrique, Tsavo.

Pourriez-vous corriger mes fautes de grammaire ou d'orthographe ou de structure de phrases SVP, c'est urgent, je dois rendre le devoir demain. Merci d'avance.

Hal and Roger, the two boys who related the tragic situation of Tsavo, Africa's largest national park, returned home, because they didn't want to more describe the horror of the scene. When they had finish the dinner, the family of Hal and Roger discuted about the future, what the two boys want to do in their live. The youngest boy, Roger, said he should leave the country, because he has fed up of that situation. And than he cried with rage. Hal, during a short time, imaginated him he arrests victoriously ten poachers and so he saves the animals of the park. He dreamed of his glory, but not of the dangers. After that, he said in a stately way : "I will be a ranger". His parents didn't tell anything, they know they couldn't, because Hal was obviously determined in his project.

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Hého les responsables du forum anglais vous êtes où ?

C'est drôle à chaque fois que je rentre un sujet personne ne me réponds je suis vraiment déçu à croire que l'on m'est oublié ah la la...j' ai l'impression que ce forum ne pas du tout...ah la la

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Ah j'oubliais maintenant c un peu trop tard por que l'on m'aide merci beaucoup quand même :cry: :mrgreen: :cry: :oops: :cry:

[cactusjo]

Voici la suite d'un texte parlant de 2 jeunes garçons qui viennent d'être interviewés à propos de braconnier sévissant dans le plus grand parc national d'Afrique, Tsavo.

Pourriez-vous corriger mes fautes de grammaire ou d'orthographe ou de structure de phrases SVP, c'est urgent, je dois rendre le devoir demain. Merci d'avance.

Hal and Roger, the two boys who related the tragic situation of Tsavo, Africa's largest national park, returned home, because they didn't want to (more' describe the horror of the scene with more details OU anylonger  :evil: . When they had finishED the dinner, HAL'S FAMILY and Roger discuSSed ( TALKED ) about the future, what the two boys wantED to do in (WITH) their liFe. The youngest boy, Roger, said he should leave the country, because he WAS fed up WITH that situation. And thEn he cried with rage ( :roll: :mrgreen:  ). Hal, during a short time, imaginated him  arrestING victoriously ten poachers and so savING the animals of the park. He dreamed of his glory, but not of the dangers. After that, he said in a stately way : "I will be a ranger". His parents didn't tell anything, they knEw they couldn't, because Hal was obviously determined in  :evil: his project.

[cactusjo]

quelques maladresses voir erreurs mais d'horreur plus !

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Unfortunately it was to late but i thank you very much for what you did for me

[girl.lady]

Salut,

Bon meme d'apres ce que tu dit il serait trop tard ms c pas grave, alors c parti :

*pour "the family of Hal and Roger" tu mets +tot " Hal's and Roger's family"

* y a aussi "future" c'est plutot "futur"

*ensuite pour " what the two...their live" c'est " what they want to do in their live"

*Et pour finir tu utilises le prétérit pour parler du futur c pas tres cohérent tt ca garcon :P

Voilà c tt ciao

[cactusjo]

:x :roll: :mrgreen: ????!!!!

Salut,

Bon meme d'apres ce que tu dit il serait trop tard ms c pas grave, alors c parti :

*pour "the family of Hal and Roger" tu mets +tot " Hal's and Roger's family"

* y a aussi "future" c'est plutot "futur"

*ensuite pour " what the two...their live" c'est " what they want to do in their live"

*Et pour finir tu utilises le prétérit pour parler du futur c pas tres cohérent tt ca garcon  :P  

Voilà c tt ciao

[cactusjo]

Unfortunately it was to ( NO : TOO car adjectif derrière , "trop" :evil: